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Hush

a limp hand I hold

as the wind takes your last breath

            the candle flickers


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      Contest: Three Line Poetry
         Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi
                 Placed: 1st

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2015

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Timothy Hicks Date: 3/7/2016 3:05:00 AM Such an evocative image ... the candle flickering has always been a powerful symbol for death coming through ... THIS is how I like haiku. Simplicity that sticks with you. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/7/2016 7:48:00 AM Thank you, Timothy. This happens to be one of my fav haiku. Debbie has been very helpful and I owe it to her to keep on improving on this form. // paul

Judy Konos Date: 2/6/2016 4:40:00 PM Hey just happened to click on best Haiku poems and guess what came up?....You ...Sir Paul of Callus....really good... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/6/2016 5:38:00 PM Thank you for a lovely late night visit, Judy:) I was on my way to bed....we're about 6/7 hrs ahead of you here...so, goodnight and happy dreams! // paul

Mark Roske Date: 4/6/2015 9:19:00 PM Stunning~ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/7/2015 4:33:00 AM Thank you Mark for the 'stunning' remark! Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/24/2015 5:18:00 PM Sad ...I hope not anyone close and not recently..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/24/2015 5:42:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Sara; no, not recent, but did in fact occur. Take care. // paul

Constance La France Date: 3/20/2015 7:16:00 AM Paul, congratulations on your first place win with this wonderful haiku . . 7 Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/21/2015 4:05:00 PM Thank you Constance! Appreciate the high rating and visit. All the best. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 3/19/2015 11:51:00 PM Lovely expression Paul! Congrats on top place win! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/21/2015 4:03:00 PM Thank you Upma. I have not taken part in many contests lately, but I notice that you have done quite well yourself! Hope you're having a lovely weekend and a bright start to spring! // paul

Kelly Deschler Date: 3/19/2015 11:28:00 PM A very beautiful expression of one of the sad, yet tender moments in life... Very nicely written, Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/21/2015 4:00:00 PM These are moments which I have experienced, Kelly. Then, when the candle goes out, emotions seem to freeze in time. // Hope spring has come your way, too:) hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/19/2015 12:55:00 PM awe-struck by your imagery, paul.. best congrats on your top win! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 3:50:00 PM Thank you, Nette! Your comments mean a lot! Your winning entry was just as delightful! hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/19/2015 11:33:00 AM Hi Paul, back to read the reply :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 12:07:00 PM Hi Linda...just read your Tanka...should I label it :( or :) // paul

Emmanuel Brian Oule Date: 3/19/2015 10:44:00 AM Elegant Congs brother Bryan Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 12:20:00 PM Hi Bryan! thank you for the 'elegant' comment! Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Tammy Reams Date: 3/19/2015 9:15:00 AM Congrats on you win. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 12:18:00 PM Thank you Tammy! All the best :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/18/2015 11:39:00 PM Nice win Paul..... LINDA Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 7:12:00 AM Thank you Linda; glad you enjoyed. /x/ paul

Skat A Date: 3/18/2015 11:10:00 PM PAUL, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 7:10:00 AM Thank you Skat; enjoyed your sand castle write, too. :) paul

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/18/2015 7:55:00 PM I had a feeling this might win big and here it is at the top! Big Congrats Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/19/2015 7:06:00 AM Thank you Connie. I tried answering to your previous comment, but the system did not allow it. Hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne Date: 3/18/2015 1:43:00 PM Sorry one last suggestion. I think this would make a great example of an Haiku for teaching purposes. Just saying! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:44:00 PM Good idea, Armand; perhaps an English teacher might be tempted to take it up! I'm retired now:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/18/2015 1:42:00 PM lovely one, Paul. Congrats for your win. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:45:00 PM Thank you Andrea; glad you like it:) // paul

Maurice Yvonne Date: 3/18/2015 1:41:00 PM Congratulations on your first place win! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:42:00 PM :) thanks

Maurice Yvonne Date: 3/18/2015 1:40:00 PM Brilliant, you need to publish this Paul! A Fav! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:42:00 PM So pleased to see you back on Soup, Armand! Thank you for the 'brilliant' comment...and the fav! All the best. // paul

Anne Rutherford Date: 3/18/2015 8:00:00 AM There is no wonder you won top prize Paul. This Haiku says it all. Congrats !!! Anne Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:40:00 PM Hi Anne! It is nice of you to come visiting with congrats and a 'like'. Thank you. // paul

Kp Nunez Date: 3/18/2015 6:37:00 AM You take my breath away...absolutely stunning write...just perfect, Paul. I take off my hat for you...Congrats!!! :) Kim Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:29:00 PM Thank you Kim! Your 'stunning' comments are much appreciated! All the best. // paul

Njeri Hunjeri Date: 3/18/2015 4:12:00 AM Soft and strong at the same time. All the best in the contest. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 2:17:00 PM Thank you Njeri...congrats and comments are very welcome:) // paul Njeri Hunjeri Date: 3/18/2015 4:13:00 AM Oops! I meant congratulations:-)

Mark Trichet Date: 3/18/2015 12:31:00 AM So much left unsaid, yet it overwhelms with emotion. A pleasure to read Paul. Congrats on first place Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 12:51:00 PM Thank you for the congrats and lovely comments, Mark. Glad you enjoyed. // paul

David Mohn Date: 3/17/2015 9:46:00 PM Wonderful Paul...big congrats on your deserved #1 Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 12:30:00 PM Many thanks, David; sometimes lady luck smiles on us:) All the best. // paul

Eve Roper Date: 3/17/2015 8:59:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Paul. a 7 Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 12:37:00 PM I am pleased with the visit and high rating, Eve! Thank you! Take care. // paul

Reason A. Poteet Date: 3/17/2015 8:50:00 PM A beautiful three-liner, forget the labeling. It is poetry at its best, Paul and obviously many think so. Congratulations on your careful choice of words. I like the title too which is not cricket for haiku; but who cares. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/18/2015 12:36:00 PM Thank you for the lovely and insightful comments, Reason! I knew that the title was not going to be in my favour, but my heart was tied to it, and was not ready to sacrifice it for the sake of winning. All the best. // paul

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