Paul Callus Poet Haiku

Hush

a limp hand I hold

as the wind takes your last breath

            the candle flickers


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      Contest: Three Line Poetry
         Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi
                 Placed: 1st

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Timothy Hicks March 7, 2016 at 3:05 AM Such an evocative image ... the candle flickering has always been a powerful symbol for death coming through ... THIS is how I like haiku. Simplicity that sticks with you. Paul Callus March 7, 2016 at 7:48 AM Thank you, Timothy. This happens to be one of my fav haiku. Debbie has been very helpful and I owe it to her to keep on improving on this form. // paul

Judy Konos February 6, 2016 at 4:40 PM Hey just happened to click on best Haiku poems and guess what came up?....You ...Sir Paul of Callus....really good... Paul Callus February 6, 2016 at 5:38 PM Thank you for a lovely late night visit, Judy:) I was on my way to bed....we're about 6/7 hrs ahead of you here...so, goodnight and happy dreams! // paul

Mark Roske April 6, 2015 at 9:19 PM Stunning~ Paul Callus April 7, 2015 at 4:33 AM Thank you Mark for the 'stunning' remark! Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Sara Kendrick March 24, 2015 at 5:18 PM Sad ...I hope not anyone close and not recently..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Paul Callus March 24, 2015 at 5:42 PM Thank you for stopping by, Sara; no, not recent, but did in fact occur. Take care. // paul

Constance La France March 20, 2015 at 7:16 AM Paul, congratulations on your first place win with this wonderful haiku . . 7 Paul Callus March 21, 2015 at 4:05 PM Thank you Constance! Appreciate the high rating and visit. All the best. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 19, 2015 at 11:51 PM Lovely expression Paul! Congrats on top place win! Paul Callus March 21, 2015 at 4:03 PM Thank you Upma. I have not taken part in many contests lately, but I notice that you have done quite well yourself! Hope you're having a lovely weekend and a bright start to spring! // paul

Kelly Deschler March 19, 2015 at 11:28 PM A very beautiful expression of one of the sad, yet tender moments in life... Very nicely written, Paul. Paul Callus March 21, 2015 at 4:00 PM These are moments which I have experienced, Kelly. Then, when the candle goes out, emotions seem to freeze in time. // Hope spring has come your way, too:) hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud March 19, 2015 at 12:55 PM awe-struck by your imagery, paul.. best congrats on your top win! Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 3:50 PM Thank you, Nette! Your comments mean a lot! Your winning entry was just as delightful! hugs // paul

Poet Destroyer A March 19, 2015 at 11:33 AM Hi Paul, back to read the reply :) Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 12:07 PM Hi Linda...just read your Tanka...should I label it :( or :) // paul

Emmanuel Brian Oule March 19, 2015 at 10:44 AM Elegant Congs brother Bryan Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 12:20 PM Hi Bryan! thank you for the 'elegant' comment! Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Tammy Reams March 19, 2015 at 9:15 AM Congrats on you win. Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 12:18 PM Thank you Tammy! All the best :) // paul

Poet Destroyer A March 18, 2015 at 11:39 PM Nice win Paul..... LINDA Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 7:12 AM Thank you Linda; glad you enjoyed. /x/ paul

Skat A March 18, 2015 at 11:10 PM PAUL, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~ Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 7:10 AM Thank you Skat; enjoyed your sand castle write, too. :) paul

Connie Marcum Wong March 18, 2015 at 7:55 PM I had a feeling this might win big and here it is at the top! Big Congrats Paul. Paul Callus March 19, 2015 at 7:06 AM Thank you Connie. I tried answering to your previous comment, but the system did not allow it. Hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne March 18, 2015 at 1:43 PM Sorry one last suggestion. I think this would make a great example of an Haiku for teaching purposes. Just saying! Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:44 PM Good idea, Armand; perhaps an English teacher might be tempted to take it up! I'm retired now:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich March 18, 2015 at 1:42 PM lovely one, Paul. Congrats for your win. Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:45 PM Thank you Andrea; glad you like it:) // paul

Maurice Yvonne March 18, 2015 at 1:41 PM Congratulations on your first place win! Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:42 PM :) thanks

Maurice Yvonne March 18, 2015 at 1:40 PM Brilliant, you need to publish this Paul! A Fav! Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:42 PM So pleased to see you back on Soup, Armand! Thank you for the 'brilliant' comment...and the fav! All the best. // paul

Anne Rutherford March 18, 2015 at 8:00 AM There is no wonder you won top prize Paul. This Haiku says it all. Congrats !!! Anne Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:40 PM Hi Anne! It is nice of you to come visiting with congrats and a 'like'. Thank you. // paul

Kp Nunez March 18, 2015 at 6:37 AM You take my breath away...absolutely stunning write...just perfect, Paul. I take off my hat for you...Congrats!!! :) Kim Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:29 PM Thank you Kim! Your 'stunning' comments are much appreciated! All the best. // paul

Njeri Hunjeri March 18, 2015 at 4:12 AM Soft and strong at the same time. All the best in the contest. Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 2:17 PM Thank you Njeri...congrats and comments are very welcome:) // paul Njeri Hunjeri March 18, 2015 at 4:13 AM Oops! I meant congratulations:-)

Mark Trichet March 18, 2015 at 12:31 AM So much left unsaid, yet it overwhelms with emotion. A pleasure to read Paul. Congrats on first place Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 12:51 PM Thank you for the congrats and lovely comments, Mark. Glad you enjoyed. // paul

David Mohn March 17, 2015 at 9:46 PM Wonderful Paul...big congrats on your deserved #1 Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 12:30 PM Many thanks, David; sometimes lady luck smiles on us:) All the best. // paul

Eve Roper March 17, 2015 at 8:59 PM Congratulations on your win, Paul. a 7 Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 12:37 PM I am pleased with the visit and high rating, Eve! Thank you! Take care. // paul

Reason A. Poteet March 17, 2015 at 8:50 PM A beautiful three-liner, forget the labeling. It is poetry at its best, Paul and obviously many think so. Congratulations on your careful choice of words. I like the title too which is not cricket for haiku; but who cares. Paul Callus March 18, 2015 at 12:36 PM Thank you for the lovely and insightful comments, Reason! I knew that the title was not going to be in my favour, but my heart was tied to it, and was not ready to sacrifice it for the sake of winning. All the best. // paul

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