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Hurricane Hips

A substantial wahine named Beulah, To please her husband was learning the hula, But the wind she created As her grass skirt gyrated Devastated most of downtown Honolulu.

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John Read

Date: 9/28/2024 10:46:00 AM

At first her husband was pleased, for Beulah only created a breeze, but when in full flow, a cruel wind would blow, like a tornado being unleashed.

Jim Slaughter
Date: 9/29/2024 10:35:00 AM

Thanks, John...and especially for responding to my limerick with an equally good one. Maybe next time she'll just try surprising her hubby with a nice "lei"...

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 9/12/2024 9:45:00 AM

This is a very good limerick. It has a fantastic image of Beulah's destructive power.

Jim Slaughter
Date: 9/12/2024 10:10:00 AM

I'll bet she won't be welcome back to Hawaii any time soon. Thanks, Hilda.

Ink Empress

Date: 9/9/2024 1:41:00 PM

Lol clever and witty one dear jim, haha! Gosh made me smile! Youv written a very creative limerick with excellent rhymes! I especially loved the line “But the wind she created As her grass skirt gyrated Devastated most of downtown Honolulu.” Gosh some wind!!!! Pleasure reading this fun brilliant one! Sending you light always

Jim Slaughter
Date: 9/10/2024 11:05:00 AM

Thank you, I E. I'll take "light" over a hurricane any day.