Nette Onclaud Poet Dramatic Verse

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Human Dignity Violated

With the stench of rhum and a play of control, he growls
amid the dark of the darkest evening;
then  reaches for his woman.. and  in a dash
pushes her growing belly, unrestrained.
She with a child inside a twitched fetus
drowns in haze of  murky kitchen light:
her rosy flesh scarred; wrists deformed again, again
praying to Mama Mary, “ Oh grant me relief,”
while his vile laughter spits, as if nothing happened.



Ten Lines Or Less Contest
Sponsor: rob carmack
Old Poem--8/31/2015

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Skat A October 16, 2015 at 9:31 PM Nette, Congratulations on your win. -SKAT-

David Mohn October 15, 2015 at 8:53 PM Astounding to see your incredible descriptive talent turned loose on dark subject matter...terrific Nette

James Inman October 15, 2015 at 8:51 AM Strong poem, Nette.

Sandra Haight October 15, 2015 at 8:47 AM Such sad, hurtful imagery, Nette, but a necessary one to bring horrors like this to the forefront. Powerfully written. Congratulations on your top win! Hugs, Sanda

Judy Konos October 15, 2015 at 7:10 AM That a compressed novel....Congratulations

Lin Lane October 15, 2015 at 3:10 AM Hi, nette. Congratulations on this win. The intensity of this piece made me cringe for the victim. Well written. ~ Lin ~

Connie Marcum Wong October 15, 2015 at 2:20 AM Wow...sad yet powerful expression of human suffering Nette. Congratulations on your top win! #7

Dr. Upma A. Sharma October 15, 2015 at 2:00 AM Congrats on superb win nette with this wonderful write!

Michael Tor October 15, 2015 at 12:44 AM Congrats nette on your win!

Robert Lindley October 14, 2015 at 8:21 PM Congrats on your win with this revealing poem my friend.

CayCay Godwin October 14, 2015 at 6:58 PM A beautifully written poem on a terribly sad, but real, topic. You covered this piece of that torment in a very effective way. Congratulations, it is deserved ... CayCay

Ralph Sergi September 5, 2015 at 5:23 PM Hi nette" A very intense poem on a person venting his failures against someone else.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 31, 2015 at 12:06 PM - Unfortunately there are many who live in such pain - Powerfully poems, Nette - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Ravi Sathasivam August 31, 2015 at 8:48 AM Excellent. Very thoughtful and powerful write. Thanks for sharing it.

Demetrios Trifiatis August 31, 2015 at 7:08 AM Unfortunately I know cases like that. What inhumanity! How one could be called human if mistreats another person, especially a woman with child in that manner? A powerful poem! Good luck, dear Nette!

Tim Smith August 30, 2015 at 5:40 PM I agree with Keith. Only a coward of a man does this.

Afolabi Muideen August 30, 2015 at 5:24 PM A well and a beautiful write for the contest, your excellent penned flows smoothly within heart ot the readers. Good luck in the contest...........A.M.

Norma Arana August 30, 2015 at 2:01 PM I was moved and enraged by your visuals here. Gripping poem which tells me that no one should be treated or abused this way. The last line makes me cringe---supreme!