Human Dignity Violated

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With the stench of rhum and a play of control, he growls amid the dark of the darkest evening; then reaches for his woman.. and in a dash pushes her growing belly, unrestrained. She with a child inside a twitched fetus drowns in haze of murky kitchen light: her rosy flesh scarred; wrists deformed again, again praying to Mama Mary, “ Oh grant me relief,” while his vile laughter spits, as if nothing happened. Ten Lines Or Less Contest Sponsor: rob carmack Old Poem--8/31/2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 10/16/2015 9:31:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your win. -SKAT-
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Date: 10/15/2015 8:53:00 PM
Astounding to see your incredible descriptive talent turned loose on dark subject matter...terrific Nette
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Date: 10/15/2015 8:51:00 AM
Strong poem, Nette.
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Date: 10/15/2015 8:47:00 AM
Such sad, hurtful imagery, Nette, but a necessary one to bring horrors like this to the forefront. Powerfully written. Congratulations on your top win! Hugs, Sanda
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Date: 10/15/2015 7:10:00 AM
That a compressed novel....Congratulations
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Date: 10/15/2015 3:10:00 AM
Hi, nette. Congratulations on this win. The intensity of this piece made me cringe for the victim. Well written. ~ Lin ~
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Date: 10/15/2015 2:20:00 AM
Wow...sad yet powerful expression of human suffering Nette. Congratulations on your top win! #7
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Date: 10/15/2015 2:00:00 AM
Congrats on superb win nette with this wonderful write!
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Date: 10/15/2015 12:44:00 AM
Congrats nette on your win!
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Date: 10/14/2015 8:21:00 PM
Congrats on your win with this revealing poem my friend.
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Date: 10/14/2015 6:58:00 PM
A beautifully written poem on a terribly sad, but real, topic. You covered this piece of that torment in a very effective way. Congratulations, it is deserved ... CayCay
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Date: 9/5/2015 5:23:00 PM
Hi nette" A very intense poem on a person venting his failures against someone else.
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Date: 8/31/2015 12:06:00 PM
- Unfortunately there are many who live in such pain - Powerfully poems, Nette - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/31/2015 8:48:00 AM
Excellent. Very thoughtful and powerful write. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 8/31/2015 7:08:00 AM
Unfortunately I know cases like that. What inhumanity! How one could be called human if mistreats another person, especially a woman with child in that manner? A powerful poem! Good luck, dear Nette!
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Date: 8/30/2015 5:40:00 PM
I agree with Keith. Only a coward of a man does this.
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Date: 8/30/2015 5:24:00 PM
A well and a beautiful write for the contest, your excellent penned flows smoothly within heart ot the readers. Good luck in the contest...........A.M.
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Date: 8/30/2015 2:01:00 PM
I was moved and enraged by your visuals here. Gripping poem which tells me that no one should be treated or abused this way. The last line makes me cringe---supreme!
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