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Premiere Contest WinnerHow Do You Feel

(For people of my generation, especially among the country folk,
dating was not in vogue. When a girl reaches the marriable age, proposals would come and after one or two formal meetings, if the boy and girl like each other, the marriage would be fixed. So, it was more like gambling)


As all teenagers, in my seventeen, I was lost in reverie of my life with my man, In my mind's canvas, I drew the image of a gallant, Who would one day come to wed and own me his. In the nick of time, he solemnly came, To hold my hand and tie the knot. With a pounding heart and quivering breath, I found him differing from the man I dreamt. The fabulous fabric in my loom, Looked at variance from the one unfurled, Transfixed between fact and fallacy, I struggled to hide a falling tear. Time marched on in silent haste, And I learned to outgrow my childish whims. Sagacity dawned with passing age, Making me discern the real from the sham. It made me admire his sanguine self. On fathomed deep beyond external mien, I saw him unveiled in taintless worth, That made my heart ever pine in love. Piecing together our halved selves, With the glue of love, our identities merged. Now he is with me in my blues, Consoling me with his balmy touch. He is with me in my joy, Making it resonant with a hearty laugh. He is there when storms rage, Whispering in my ear, not to fear. He taught me how to savor life, To meet the slings with radiant cheer. Now the image is etched deep, Never to erase, nor to revise! And the old portrait locked within, Grew so musty, bereft of use. In its place, I keep within, His solid figure in indelible print. Jan.22. 2023 ~ PLACED FIRST~ How Do You Feel Poetry Contest Sponsor- Mystic Rose Rose
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Gasun Avatar
February 5, 2023 at 3:09 AM
My warmest congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win and on this superb piece my dear friend Valsa. Thank you so much for sharing this precious gem and your wonderful feeling and lovelife with your beloved. I love and enjoyed your winning poem a lot. Thank you so much for sharing. God bless you always and your family.
Agustin Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 11:18 PM
Wow! Congrats! I rejoice with you, not only for your trophy, but also for your testimony of your loving togetherness with your spouse. God bless you.
Alex Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 7:13 PM
Significant experience of life with passing feelings strongly and very beautifully expressed. Each phase says unique feelings involved in "a pounding heart and quivering breath", "struggled to hide a falling tear" etc... are identified. Congratulations!
Mcintosh Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 2:11 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful winning write. Beautifully done. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
Volumes Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 1:17 PM
Congratulations Valsa, for a well deserved win.
Dietrich Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 12:37 PM
So beautifully written, Valsa . Congrats on your awesome trophy win.
Ashley Avatar
January 24, 2023 at 11:56 AM
Dearest Valsa, I'm enthralled with your endearing pen! The emotions of your exceptional poem are beautifully laid out upon the poetic page. Your heartfelt appreciation for a true love organically grown through the nurture of both time and nature (the agreeable human nature of you both) is poignant and palpable. I celebrate this enduring love and I celebrate your excellent trophy win in Rose's contest. Congratulations, my sweet friend, a deserving win indeed! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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January 24, 2023 at 11:01 AM
How do you feel I dared ask? You unloosed your soul and gave me just that. I felt the power of your answer, dear poet/poetess. Thank you for joining my contest, congrats and God bless !
George Avatar
January 27, 2023 at 2:29 AM
Thank you so much Rose for this great honor bestowed. Sorry I couldn't instantly respond as I have been away from home on a tour for three days. This trophy win is such a pleasant surprise to me. :) Love and blessings !
Lawrence Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 7:27 AM
Dear Valsa , Your evolving love grown from time and maturity is beautiful to witness in this timeline of your life . Thank you for sharing this tapestry of heart experience with us . I love to learn about your heart and life. Big hugs , Susan :)
Poet Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 6:58 AM
With time, the passion that started the marriage dies out, and the pair are left with nothing on which to build their bond. Compassion and longing for one another are the seeds from which love grows. Wonderfully, your beautiful poem reflects the strengthening of your marriage through time. Good luck with the contest.
Pandit Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 5:58 AM
Love grows as we reciprocate for one another virtues of care and longings. Our ideal expectations are never met--but then, we don't really know enough of reality when young. Splendid write, Valsa.
Volumes Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 1:52 AM
Such an honest poem Valsa. So many marriages are exactly the opposite, infatuation steadily fades and there is nothing left to build the marriage on, and the marriage fails. Your beautiful poem describes how your marriage grew stronger with age and that is such a blessing.
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January 21, 2023 at 11:04 PM
When young, one has particular whims which change with maturity. Then real love blossoms. and I wish you many years of bliss, dear Valsa.
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