House of Cards
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I'm taking an online course through Coursera on musicianship. The first two modules were on music theory and music production (using tech to record songs). The current module is on song writing. This assignment was to write an unstable verse and a stable chorus, using number of lines and lengths of lines to effect the stability or to add emphasis. In theory, the shorter odd-numbered line in the verse helps provide instability, while the longer even-numbered line in the chorus provides stability and emphasis. I may further develop this piece into an actual song, probably by splitting up and expanding that verse into two thoughts, then adding a third verse after the chorus.
I thought we’d be together,
Just you and I forever,
Building our castle of dreams.
We couldn’t be divided--
Our hopes and goals united--
Was a house of cards it seems.
I can’t believe it.
I don’t believe you’d leave me
After all that we’ve been through.
I can’t believe you’ve given up.
Can’t accept you’ve given up on me and you.
Copyright © Mark J. Halliday | Year Posted 2016
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