Hour

Humans wake up don’t waste the rushing hour Your children looking at what you've done Depend their future on your hand Counting the near days To draw their fate Hey again! You! See! Well stand! Tame time stared Waiting to see the new The novel bright, significant sun Lifting your sorrow unchain for tomorrow Work hard aim big to gain the dream dreamed

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Timothy Jacks

Date: 6/1/2013 5:40:00 PM

That's new to me, i have to say not only is it a powerful poem, the word play is very intellegent. I like this one alot!

Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 7:16:00 PM

thank you Timothy. appreciate it!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/30/2013 10:24:00 AM

I really like the formatting that you did here, Elai-- and I agree with Eileen, this can be listed under shape poetry. This is a nice wake up call, so to speak.

Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 7:17:00 PM

thanks P.Ink

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/24/2013 10:36:00 AM

This is lovely! It could go under shape poem as well. I LOVE that last line...really brings the message home! :) Thanks for your visits! :)

Elai Cee
Date: 5/24/2013 11:39:00 AM

welcome lovely... thank you too

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/24/2013 8:21:00 AM

The power of the hourglass. Time contained, but unstoppable. This was awesome!

Elai Cee
Date: 5/24/2013 8:27:00 AM

thank you Drake. u'r wonderful!