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Hot Summer Day ----- contest entry

Hydrants open; the waters gush and flood the burning road. The children cheer and run in suits, to feel the flowing cold. While mom and pop stand side by side, the neighbors prom- enade, and Mary Jack and Adam splash, as Becky cools her feet. The Conners dash with flapping towels, into the flooded lane. DeMarco tries his best to swim, but blames the cobble stones. Beside a dirty bin, a boy stands all alone. His cheeks are thin and pale; he's almost skin and bone. His eyes go wide, as little Leslie leaves the light to take him by the hand, and leads him back amongst her friends. We all remember Zack. 9-3-2017

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Date: 9/18/2017 9:37:00 PM
Very creative and moving--Congrats, Jack. Janice
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 10:08:00 PM
thank you, Janice
Date: 9/18/2017 8:33:00 PM
It's as if you are in the picture with everyone you know. Well done and creative write. Congratulations.
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 8:45:00 PM
Thank you, Janis; I'd hoped it might touch that feeling.
Date: 9/18/2017 8:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your win too Jack! I like how you personalized your poem with the little kids names!~Che :)
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 8:42:00 PM
thank you, Cheryl :)
Date: 9/18/2017 6:45:00 PM
Congrats Jack!
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 6:51:00 PM
thanks Vijay
Date: 9/18/2017 6:23:00 PM
Congrats Jack, great imagery :)
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 6:42:00 PM
thanks Gary :)
Date: 9/17/2017 5:54:00 PM
Thank you, Jack , for entering my contest. .... Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve ~`*
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/18/2017 6:40:00 PM
thanks, Eve!
Date: 9/16/2017 11:56:00 AM
Great use of words.. well written Jack
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/16/2017 12:09:00 PM
Thank you, Silent One.
Date: 9/16/2017 9:25:00 AM
Such an exciting time when they'd open the hydrants. I remember all the kids rushing out of their houses on our block. Thanks for the memories!
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/16/2017 10:27:00 AM
I'm so glad you liked it :) The prompt for the Hot Summer Day contest is a picture of kids in a street playing in the water from the hydrant. I think the contest is still open :)
Date: 9/14/2017 8:51:00 PM
LOL, beyond giggles now.., You're too funny! That was good Jack! :)
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/14/2017 9:05:00 PM
;D
Date: 9/14/2017 7:22:00 PM
Ohh what a sad end to the poem. An excellent write Jack. Well done in rhyme and content. Good luck in the contest.
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/14/2017 8:34:00 PM
"Your honor, I plead guilty to involuntary prosodicide due to too much volta-ge. RIP, Zach."
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Susan Ashley
Date: 9/14/2017 7:49:00 PM
lol! Your reply has me giggling.., yes, letting Zack slip through the cracks,lol, really does pack an emotional punch!
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Jack Webster
Date: 9/14/2017 7:31:00 PM
XD oh, no! I guess the last phrase is too ambiguous. It does sort of sound like he died or something, doesn't it? Was trying to go for reminiscing on the day he joined leslie's group of friends XD lol I really let Zack slip through the cracks, didn't i? Oh, boy... I'm glad it's still emotionally effective even if it wasnt the happy ending I intended... alas I really appreciate your feedback. Thank you :)