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Written on June 26th, 2025 for Robert James Liguori's Ronnie James Dio Prompt. Song inspiration is Holy Diver.
Disoriented and departed from passing terra forma, I sink further into the Sea of Tranquility. As corroded chains of my existence dissipate, What once tethered my soul to Gaia's gifts Drifts aimlessly in the abyss of space, Freezing as they pass me by. Shards of ice sparkle like crystals upon their surface— The only illumination against a bitter, lonely backdrop. Without warning, I hear the beeping of my oxygen tank blaring. Looking down, it says less than five percent. Within mere minutes, deprivation will set in. Before I black out completely, The hope of rescue is no longer imminent. It's now time to make peace with all that I regretted. I peer out into infinity, Praying I won't just burn out like a long-forgotten star. It's getting harder to breathe now. I can feel carbon dioxide flood my lungs. Fear courses like waves crashing against the shore. As the needle touches zero, taking in my few last breaths, I separate soul from corporeal form And float amongst endless galaxies.

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Date: 6/29/2025 11:43:00 AM
Congrats. This is an awesome take on the lyrics!
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Sara Jama
Date: 7/5/2025 6:58:00 AM
Thank you so much.
Date: 6/27/2025 9:37:00 PM
powerful. congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Sara Jama
Date: 7/5/2025 6:57:00 AM
Thank you very much.
Date: 6/27/2025 6:00:00 AM
I’m building a digital graveyard for your collection of poetic corpses. Great poem though. As always. Congrats on second place!
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Sara Jama
Date: 7/5/2025 6:57:00 AM
Thank you for placing me in your contest. Send digital flowers. Lol
Date: 6/26/2025 8:38:00 PM
Omg this is one of my worst nightmares but this poem is a dream. The fear of drowning is horrifying, but I hear that drowning is peaceful for some reason...I'll believe it when I see it. Beautifully done.
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Sara Jama
Date: 6/27/2025 5:30:00 AM
Thank you and yes drowning also scares the hell out of me too.

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