Hollow Point

The steel gray ocean pounds the shore,
it strikes a somber, morbid chord,
I sit becalmed now, by the roar,
on the porch of weathered boards.

I reminisce on times before,
when life was mine, an open door,
I lift my eyes, to God implore,
every muscle, sinew sore.

The pain cuts through me like a sword,
I've lost my touch, my sharp rapport,
I've prayed my health could be restored,
caress the bullets, smooth, large bored.

No seaside silence anymore,
death is final, evermore,
full metal jackets do the chore,
memories flood, a cold downpour,

Crisp white eyelet pinafores.
southern pines and sycamores,
endless secrets to explore,
a child again, forevermore.


©copyright2010DanielleWhite

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 2/2/2012 7:23:00 AM
I have truly enjoyed reading your poetry you have posted here at PoetrySoup. You are a very special poet and I wish you the best in your life and with your poetry. Two thumbs up to you Danielle. Love and best wishes always, Carol
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Date: 2/27/2010 3:08:00 AM
Beautiful and sad at the same time. Thank God there is a God...and hope for the eternities without pain, but full of joy, instead. God be with you. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 2/4/2010 2:09:00 PM
Great imagery here, Danielle ... we have SOOO much to live for ... smile ... love the last stanza !!
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Date: 2/2/2010 7:44:00 PM
This is a very moving expression of melancholy, Danielle, but it is also very encouraging to see how well you have come through your surgery and recovery. I saw your blog, both today's and a few weeks ago, and read your astonishing bio. You have tremendous courage and a beautiful poetic voice. Trust that your "sharp rapport" will re-emerge. You're doing fine. I will hold you in my prayers along with many others. Thank you for posting your blog so we could see.
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Date: 2/2/2010 1:04:00 PM
A truly ~~Magnificent~~write Danielle. So sad though. You are in my thoughts and prayers. Keep writing my friend. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/2/2010 6:14:00 AM
There is great sadness deep in your soul, it speaks of your great pain of body and mind, it is difficult to have faith when your life is in tatters, but you are looking in the right direction, to God. I am praying for you, and you have not lost your touch, dear heart, you write beautiful and wonderfully well, as always, the soup is changing, I suppose nothing stays the same forever, but I will always remain an admirer of your poetry....
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Date: 2/1/2010 11:06:00 PM
I wanted to stop by and say that this piece is very sad. As I read through it I feel so much pain. You express emotions so beautifully but I hate to think of you feeling this much sadness. My prayers are with you through this difficult recovery time. If you want to talk or just vent please feel free to soupmail. Peace, light, and love be with you always. Keep writing I love reading. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 2/1/2010 8:46:00 PM
NO, NO, NO! You haven't lost your touch. I know times have been tough for you and there are a lot of folks here praying that your health improves. This is a chilling and powerful poem, Daniel, but don't go down a dark road. It's your optimism that I admire so much. Much love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/1/2010 7:00:00 PM
Intense write Danielle and u are pouring out your sweet soul in this write.. so tenderly touching... luv.. Linda-Marie.. My entry was "Halfway" .. if u can recover it..
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