Holding On - a Waltz Wave

Sands
                                                       trickle
                                                         in
                                                    my palms
                                                      as I try
                                                      to grip
                                                       them;
                                                      I clinch
                                                  my fists hard
                                                to the last grain
                                                    hoping that
                                                       I could
                                                         hold 
                                                         on to
                                                      the traces
                                                        left on
                                                          my
                                                        empty 
                                                        hands.


                                                   11 June 2021
             
                                         Waltz Wave Poetry Contest
                                                By Kim Merryman
                                           Lines checked - 19 lines
                      Syllable Checked 1,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,3,4,3,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,1

                                  
                                   A Briand Strand 1095 Poetry Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 8/16/2021 9:22:00 AM
This was surely not an easy pattern to follow! You have penned an incredible poem under these stringent guidelines.
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Date: 7/10/2021 1:44:00 AM
Beautiful Work. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/27/2021 9:06:00 AM
JCB, wonderful picture of something all of us have tried to do - hold onto something slipping away. Nicely done metaphor my friend. Congratulations on your winning placement.
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Date: 6/26/2021 5:40:00 PM
A well-written waltz wave, JCB! Congrats on your win in my contest! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 6/24/2021 5:55:00 PM
I remember this one!!! Back with my congrats.
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Date: 6/13/2021 11:02:00 AM
this is so nice. Love this one. Love the beach!!
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Date: 6/11/2021 4:51:00 PM
Aaahh. No matter how tight you clapse or hand grasp the sand, they just go through... nicely penned.
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Date: 6/11/2021 4:23:00 PM
Captivating thoughts on the elusive waltz of time. Well imagined! Blessings, Evelyn
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Date: 6/11/2021 1:41:00 PM
Ah, those elusive grains of sand, ever-slipping through our hands -- no two are alike, on life's winding turnpike. Lovely writ, JCB. Peace, Gershon
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Date: 6/11/2021 11:36:00 AM
Beautiful verse, JCB, good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve PS, I am not sure if you did your submitting entry right , but place -- Less than Greater than symbols' between the written poem. to center your verse you missed sands in your center body
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Date: 6/11/2021 4:27:00 PM
Now I did it...Thank you dear Eve. TC.
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JCB Brul
Date: 6/11/2021 3:49:00 PM
Thank you dear Eve...I did center it but I can't figure out how did it happen..But anyway it is not submitted yet. I will try to realine again.
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