His Eyes

I remember the curve in the small of his back where I fit just right and where my knees were cupped by his. They say he’s aged now, tired, sad, silver in his hair but, so have I, and know this it was never the chiseled features of Adonis I sought but that twinkle of eye, never the perfection of legend but a swagger of mischievous pride. I remember the way he looked at me like he’d died and gone to heaven the boom of his laughter, still rings in my mind beside the hollow in his shoulder where my cheek fit. They say he’s tired now worn down by time but I won’t see it…I have memories and the light I’m sure is still twinkling in his eyes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Macfarlane Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 12:53 PM
The write touched my heart....beautiful words Debbie. Congrats on your win!
Poet Avatar
October 13, 2012 at 9:38 AM
Congrats on your top win with this gem!!
Cheesman Avatar
October 12, 2012 at 3:47 AM
Congratulations Debbie! Fabulous win - sorry it's delayed...just getting a chance to read the poems now - Shaz :D
Sweetheart Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 10:32 PM
MANY CONGRATS DEBBIE ON ANOTHER GREAT AND GLORIOUS FIRST PLACE WIN LUV ..
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October 9, 2012 at 8:32 PM
Debbie, congratulations, with your awesome poem in Gail's contest..... xox~pd
Arowolo Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 6:10 PM
Wow!wonderful and beautiful write,Debbie...I love this..Congratulations on your superb win...
Richards Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 5:24 PM
Oh my.........I just love this, it makes me almost weep, for this sentiment is so so poignant and real, and will hit home to so many. Love it......did I say that already?
May Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 2:59 PM
beautiful write....congrats on your win
Eastman Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 12:27 PM
Congratulations on your write. Beautifully written.
Liwayway Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 11:11 AM
a big winner indeed!! a superb write my friend Debbie..Congratulations!!! (^_^) hugs and Cheers!!!
Grisetti Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 9:56 AM
Congratulations on your win. I remember being moved the first time I read this.
Brown Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 8:48 AM
Congratulations on your win in the Diamonds Contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Gasun Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 8:42 AM
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FIRST WIN, DEBBIE. THIS IS REALLY BEAUTIFUL. HUGS:) LG
Brown Avatar
December 16, 2011 at 6:36 AM
i really like that poem
Merryman Avatar
December 13, 2011 at 6:56 PM
Congrats on your win, Debbie. Kim
Puddifoot Avatar
December 12, 2011 at 1:51 PM
congrats on your winning poem, ah yes, the eyes have it...your comment on my poem made me laugh debbie, especially about the kleenex! :-)
Poet Avatar
December 12, 2011 at 11:53 AM
Debi,Congrats on your win with this creative write.Enjoyed.
Brown Avatar
December 12, 2011 at 8:35 AM
Congratulations on your win in Susan's "Silver Strands" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Eastman Avatar
December 12, 2011 at 8:08 AM
Good poem. Congratulations on the win.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 9:14 PM
Congratulations Debbie x
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 6:35 PM
A wonderful poem Deb and I loved it! Congratulations! It is much higher in my thoughts.
Dietrich Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 4:20 PM
Debs, I LOVED this one!!!! Congratulations and soupmail.
Johnson Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 3:17 PM
I rate it much higher. Great reading. Congratulations Debbie. Love, Joyce
Williams Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 2:26 PM
Debbie congrats on your win..David
Quigley Avatar
December 11, 2011 at 2:11 PM
Wow Debbie, this is great. I love free verse. Would have placed this higher. Congrats
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