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Hiroshima

a motionless pond

reflects an unblemished sky 

where war once swallowed the sun -

blossoms drift like tears

skimming over ancient wounds

while doves fly against the wind




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For Brian Strand's Contest: #218

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Janis Medders Tobechi

October 7, 2016 at 6:06 PM

This is beautiful. I understand the imagery of every line because I have read a lot about the bombing. Deeply beautiful, A 7

Francis J Grasso

October 7, 2016 at 8:34 AM

Congratulations, Carrie! Beautifully expressed! ...Fran

Teddy Kimathi

October 7, 2016 at 5:08 AM

The imagery blends well with the emotions... Congrats Carrie, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!!! ;-)

Paloma P

October 6, 2016 at 6:06 PM

Such a delicate poem about the harsh realities of war. Congrats on your win!

Sandra Haight

October 6, 2016 at 4:16 PM

Such powerful imagery of a horrific, unforgettable event in history, Carrie. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

L. J. Carber

October 6, 2016 at 2:33 PM

Near perfection in the way it captures the deep beauty of life even when it's surrounded by one of history's myriad horrors. ( And Carrie-- I've visited Hiroshima and saw the pond I'm guessing you are referencing within the park built over the site of ground zero.)

Jslambert Mister Roboto

June 27, 2014 at 11:39 AM

an ominous reflection of a serious humanitarian infraction.

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 11, 2014 at 1:27 PM

- Congratulations on your 4nd place "Itty Bitty" poems, Carrie!! (My poem was so itty bitty that it dropped out of the contest :))) - Have a nice weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

April 10, 2014 at 10:33 PM

carrie, this is fantastic. the only thing that kept me from putting it higher was that I looked up the form and it seemed your syllables did not all line up exactly as the form states. Unless I just did not understand it correctly. Anyway, marvelous poem about that horrible event. Congrats in my contest.