Highveld Storm

Oh Aphrodite! Mother of my two pearls
Venus of my night sky
Commander of my world

I fell for you like a comet
I burnt for you like Mars
Abide in my trajectory
While guided by stars

Your sonnet dedication metered
All is written in quatrain
I'm completed in your presence
In your absence I abstain

Diurnally blinded by  fire in the sky
Cupped my hand to shade my eyes
And thirstily complain, about the lack of rain
Elongated animals on savanas and  plains


Nocturnally beleagered but eternally yours
Seeking answers in  ash , while  staring at  coals
no one hears my guitar  so voicelessly strummed
Flames my desire  , so forsaken  my soul

A hundred thousand embers
Sparked a thousand million stars
Explosions in the ether
Flashing diamonds that we know

Unprepared for this  journey
Undeterred my savage heart
Skies are ripped and torn by thunder
Clouds adrift and left asunder

Lonely cloud goes East and cries
The other West, and melted... dies

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 9/4/2019 1:28:00 AM
Beautiful flow and imagery, truly enjoyed your write.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/4/2019 3:38:00 PM
Ah, a new visitor comes by. Thank you DM Bbbit
Date: 10/3/2017 11:29:00 AM
Here again I just needed to be on the highveld.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/4/2017 1:04:00 AM
Hi Patricia,you fire me up to find some mojo again which has left me for a spell. I trust you are well. Thank you so much
Date: 8/25/2017 10:12:00 AM
OH JANNIE, this poem is absolutely beautiful.It drew me from first word to last. Meant to be read allowed it is dreamy, romantic and yearning. As for the clouds what can you do with Mother Natures whims?
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 8/31/2017 4:06:00 PM
Hi Patricia. I am humbled by your remarks and deeply touched by your presence on my site. All I can say is thank you so much.
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 8/31/2017 8:01:00 AM
Back again to read this great poem now a favourite of mine.with your permission.
Date: 1/24/2017 8:05:00 AM
Had to "favorite" this one, Jannie - love it! The imagery, rhythm, concept, and of course of celestial bearing - keep up the great work! (Any ideas as to how I can get people to comment on my poems? I have well over a hundred poems here, most of which I feel are a good deal above average, but very, very few comments. Is there a process or clique here that I'm unaware of? Thanks in advance, my friend). :)
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/24/2017 8:14:00 AM
Hi Greg i am honoured by your visit and ty for the compliments. The more you interact with members on PS, the more they more they will do likewise. Its a daily thing to check out the other poets. You work is much better than average, do that and get noticed
Date: 1/15/2017 7:09:00 PM
Beautifully done my friend. So well expressed and lovely rhyme. Loved it. God Bless and thank for the kind words on my "One Year Later". JB
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/15/2017 10:19:00 PM
Thank you Judy.
Date: 1/14/2017 1:22:00 PM
Jannie! This is a wow and my poetry adrenaline is spiked! The first 3 stanzas grabbed me, had me sitting up straighter with excitement for the rest of this excellent rhyme-flowing, imagery-packed and emotionally filled poem of longing as only one who has loved can long. Good to be reading you, especially at this level of your talent. You blew me away ... CayCay
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/25/2017 5:39:00 AM
My dear Cay Cay, Ioose track of so may things these days. Forgive my absentmindedness. Off course you read it. My mind seems to be beleagured by gremlins.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/14/2017 4:00:00 PM
My special friend this is too nice to hear. My ears burn. Both you and Freddie are people I respect for your talent, so I am deeply grateful for your utterance
Date: 1/13/2017 1:15:00 PM
Wow! You have a way w/words, Jannie. A beautiful way w/words. A fabulous sonnet is really too underwhelming a praise I can give. This poem is larger than life. It is a rare jewel in the pantheon of poetry on this website. You are a rare talent, my friend. Breathtaking poetry. I love reading your thoughts/feelings. A beautiful mind you have. Love and more love to you always.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/14/2017 3:57:00 PM
Freddie my brother I thank you graciously for such praise. I made a mistake because it isnt a true sonnet . But those are semantics right now.I am so humbled
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