Jannie Breedt Poet Rhyme

Highveld Storm

Oh Aphrodite! Mother of my two pearls
Venus of my night sky
Commander of my world

I fell for you like a comet
I burnt for you like Mars
Abide in my trajectory
While guided by stars

Your sonnet dedication metered
All is written in quatrain
I'm completed in your presence
In your absence I abstain

Diurnally blinded by  fire in the sky
Cupped my hand to shade my eyes
And thirstily complain, about the lack of rain
Elongated animals on savanas and  plains


Nocturnally beleagered but eternally yours
Seeking answers in  ash , while  staring at  coals
no one hears my guitar  so voicelessly strummed
Flames my desire  , so forsaken  my soul

A hundred thousand embers
Sparked a thousand million stars
Explosions in the ether
Flashing diamonds that we know

Unprepared for this  journey
Undeterred my savage heart
Skies are ripped and torn by thunder
Clouds adrift and left asunder

Lonely cloud goes East and cries
The other West, and melted... dies

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DM Babbit September 4, 2019 at 1:28 AM Beautiful flow and imagery, truly enjoyed your write. Jannie Breedt September 4, 2019 at 3:38 PM Ah, a new visitor comes by. Thank you DM Bbbit

Patricia Cresswell October 3, 2017 at 11:29 AM Here again I just needed to be on the highveld. Jannie Breedt October 4, 2017 at 1:04 AM Hi Patricia,you fire me up to find some mojo again which has left me for a spell. I trust you are well. Thank you so much

Patricia Cresswell August 25, 2017 at 10:12 AM OH JANNIE, this poem is absolutely beautiful.It drew me from first word to last. Meant to be read allowed it is dreamy, romantic and yearning. As for the clouds what can you do with Mother Natures whims? Jannie Breedt August 31, 2017 at 4:06 PM Hi Patricia. I am humbled by your remarks and deeply touched by your presence on my site. All I can say is thank you so much. Patricia Cresswell August 31, 2017 at 8:01 AM Back again to read this great poem now a favourite of mine.with your permission.

Gregory Richard Barden January 24, 2017 at 8:05 AM Had to "favorite" this one, Jannie - love it! The imagery, rhythm, concept, and of course of celestial bearing - keep up the great work! (Any ideas as to how I can get people to comment on my poems? I have well over a hundred poems here, most of which I feel are a good deal above average, but very, very few comments. Is there a process or clique here that I'm unaware of? Thanks in advance, my friend). :) Jannie Breedt January 24, 2017 at 8:14 AM Hi Greg i am honoured by your visit and ty for the compliments. The more you interact with members on PS, the more they more they will do likewise. Its a daily thing to check out the other poets. You work is much better than average, do that and get noticed

Judy Ball January 15, 2017 at 7:09 PM Beautifully done my friend. So well expressed and lovely rhyme. Loved it. God Bless and thank for the kind words on my "One Year Later". JB Jannie Breedt January 15, 2017 at 10:19 PM Thank you Judy.

CayCay Godwin January 14, 2017 at 1:22 PM Jannie! This is a wow and my poetry adrenaline is spiked! The first 3 stanzas grabbed me, had me sitting up straighter with excitement for the rest of this excellent rhyme-flowing, imagery-packed and emotionally filled poem of longing as only one who has loved can long. Good to be reading you, especially at this level of your talent. You blew me away ... CayCay Jannie Breedt November 25, 2017 at 5:39 AM My dear Cay Cay, Ioose track of so may things these days. Forgive my absentmindedness. Off course you read it. My mind seems to be beleagured by gremlins. Jannie Breedt January 14, 2017 at 4:00 PM My special friend this is too nice to hear. My ears burn. Both you and Freddie are people I respect for your talent, so I am deeply grateful for your utterance

Freddie Robinson Jr. January 13, 2017 at 1:15 PM Wow! You have a way w/words, Jannie. A beautiful way w/words. A fabulous sonnet is really too underwhelming a praise I can give. This poem is larger than life. It is a rare jewel in the pantheon of poetry on this website. You are a rare talent, my friend. Breathtaking poetry. I love reading your thoughts/feelings. A beautiful mind you have. Love and more love to you always. Jannie Breedt January 14, 2017 at 3:57 PM Freddie my brother I thank you graciously for such praise. I made a mistake because it isnt a true sonnet . But those are semantics right now.I am so humbled