Constance La France Poet Dizain

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Poetry/Dizain/Hiding a Broken Heart
Copyright Protected, ID 10-1587-533-21
All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France

Written, October 21, 2023
For the Internationl Contest, Pick A Topic
Sponsor, Miranda Hawley, Judged 10/26/2023

Ninth Place

Hiding a Broken Heart

 

"I'm okay, you're okay is a mask in the land of pretend "


I live in a vast land known as pretend,
it is a sad place of death and decay;
I'm okay ...  I tell family and friend.
But, in truth I relive all deaths-  each day,
in my mind's eye are the graves where they lay.
I wear a mask, and guise, and a false face,
hiding, never facing grief face-to-face.
But, I must or I will never be healed,
and if I can, you can  ... the past retrace;
no more shield- we need all to be revealed.

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Paula Goldsmith October 29, 2023 at 11:45 AM Congratulations on your win. A powerful/sad ~ write/quote/picture. I'm okay is a mask one will wear. We may never know the hurts others are feeling. Have a blessed day writing away..................... Constance La France October 30, 2023 at 6:05 AM Paula, thank you so much for the congratulations , agree we humans are very good at hiding our hurts, blessings

Debjani Mitra October 27, 2023 at 6:42 PM Well Versed, we make ourselves more miserable by pretence Constance La France October 28, 2023 at 1:57 PM Debjana, thank you so much for the visit and comment, blessings

Miranda Hawley October 26, 2023 at 7:19 PM I know what it is like to tell people you are okay when you are not. I also ask people from time to time if they really want to know how I am doing. Good job with your poem and congrats on your win. Oh yeah, you choose a great picture to go with your poem. Constance La France October 27, 2023 at 3:23 AM Miranda, thank you so much for the contest and my placement and the comment, compliment and congrats, appreciate, blessings

Christina Bowring October 23, 2023 at 12:47 PM Such a beautiful poem dear Constance as always from your golden pen. So heartfelt and full of deep emotions. So many will be able to relate to this. The picture accompanying the poem makes it even more poignant. ‘In my mind’s eye are the graves where they lay’ really stand out and grabs you. Heart rendering.The last few lines admirably show strength, wisdom. Touching Constance, so touching. Bless you and hugs to you xx Constance La France October 23, 2023 at 2:47 PM Christina, thank you so much for the compliment and lovely comment, appreciate, hugs and blessings

Andrea Dietrich October 21, 2023 at 3:22 PM :ove this one, Constance . You don't usuallu rhyme . Is it for a contest? Constance La France October 21, 2023 at 5:26 PM Andrea, thank you so much for the the compliment, appreciate. Actually I rhyme often and yes it is for a contest, blessings

Karen Jones October 21, 2023 at 12:24 PM Deep and revealing. It is as if you rip the bandaid off to let the wounds breathe facilitating healing though painful. Thought provoking. Constance La France October 21, 2023 at 5:26 PM Karen, thank you so much for the great comment, blessings

Ink Empress October 21, 2023 at 12:08 PM So heartfelt and sincere, well expressed, we all live in a land of pretend and sometimes i find it so hard to respond to a simple “ how are you” as its not easy. I felt this. Well expressed as always Constance La France October 21, 2023 at 5:29 PM Ink, thank you so much for the compliment, appreciate. How are you a robotic question and we give a robotic answer when in fact we are destroyed inside our heart and soul but we become skilled at hiding it from the world, blessings