Home » Poems » Jan Allison » He's Smokin'

Notes About The Poem

He's Smokin'

Here lie the ashes of Freddie Croaker
He’d always been a lifelong smoker!

Inspired by Contest

4/12/19

addictiondeathhumorousepitaph

♡Like0

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Kim Rodrigues

April 26, 2019 at 8:16 AM

WOW!

Robert Pettit

April 16, 2019 at 6:20 PM

Short and very sweet. It gets its point across very well.

Jan Allison

April 24, 2019 at 6:38 AM

thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

April 13, 2019 at 9:09 AM

Good one, Jan. Can't stand the smell of cigarette smoke. Never took up the addiction and spared spending thousands of dollars. I finished a poem on a father's will to his children. I'll post it after a few tweaks of editing. Many thanks for stopping. / M

Jan Allison

April 13, 2019 at 12:44 PM

I've already commented on the will poem maybe our comments overlapped:-) I've never smoked either - the smell is so vile, but my father did as did my MIL :-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

April 12, 2019 at 5:17 PM

hahaha. LOVE the name choice!!! Thanks, by the way, for your wonderful congrats to me at the blog.

Jan Allison

April 13, 2019 at 12:42 PM

I knew someone with nearly this name - see my comment to Paul:-) Not sure if you are familiar with the term he croaked for someone dying!:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

April 12, 2019 at 3:33 PM

This is really good, Jan, especially bringing into play both types of ashes. Freddie Croaker reminds me of a frog. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

April 13, 2019 at 12:40 PM

I went to school with a Freddie Crocker who was a smoker even at a young age probably 11 or 12 - changed the name to croaker for the poem as we say here someone croaked when they died, not sure if its a term you know! :-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

April 12, 2019 at 2:52 PM

As I smoked 2-4 packs of "coffin nails" every day for 35-years, I presume he died from lack of sexual exertion? Good luck! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison

April 13, 2019 at 12:35 PM

I've never heard them called coffin nails, coughing nails would be also apt - my dad died of lung and bowel cancer ... maybe that's why I write so much about poop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin

April 12, 2019 at 1:00 PM

Very funny - Joseph May did one on a dentist that you'd like. This is clever, you are clever and I love reading you, without lapse - I love each write. All the best, dear one ... CayCay

Jan Allison

April 13, 2019 at 12:34 PM

I read Joseph's poem it was very witty:-) hugs Jan xx