He's Smokin'

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Here lie the ashes of Freddie Croaker He’d always been a lifelong smoker! Inspired by Contest 4/12/19

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/26/2019 8:16:00 AM

WOW!

Robert Pettit

Date: 4/16/2019 6:20:00 PM

Short and very sweet. It gets its point across very well.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/24/2019 6:38:00 AM

thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 4/13/2019 9:09:00 AM

Good one, Jan. Can't stand the smell of cigarette smoke. Never took up the addiction and spared spending thousands of dollars. I finished a poem on a father's will to his children. I'll post it after a few tweaks of editing. Many thanks for stopping. / M

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2019 12:44:00 PM

I've already commented on the will poem maybe our comments overlapped:-) I've never smoked either - the smell is so vile, but my father did as did my MIL :-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/12/2019 5:17:00 PM

hahaha. LOVE the name choice!!! Thanks, by the way, for your wonderful congrats to me at the blog.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2019 12:42:00 PM

I knew someone with nearly this name - see my comment to Paul:-) Not sure if you are familiar with the term he croaked for someone dying!:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/12/2019 3:33:00 PM

This is really good, Jan, especially bringing into play both types of ashes. Freddie Croaker reminds me of a frog. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2019 12:40:00 PM

I went to school with a Freddie Crocker who was a smoker even at a young age probably 11 or 12 - changed the name to croaker for the poem as we say here someone croaked when they died, not sure if its a term you know! :-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/12/2019 2:52:00 PM

As I smoked 2-4 packs of "coffin nails" every day for 35-years, I presume he died from lack of sexual exertion? Good luck! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2019 12:35:00 PM

I've never heard them called coffin nails, coughing nails would be also apt - my dad died of lung and bowel cancer ... maybe that's why I write so much about poop lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 4/12/2019 1:00:00 PM

Very funny - Joseph May did one on a dentist that you'd like. This is clever, you are clever and I love reading you, without lapse - I love each write. All the best, dear one ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2019 12:34:00 PM

I read Joseph's poem it was very witty:-) hugs Jan xx