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Held Captive

(For a contest using another poets lines switched up) HELD CAPTIVE The wind blows, and gusts prevail I sense your essence in the breeze Descending onto my grateful knees I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease. yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease Finding soon…** Your own anguish appeased** Sounds of swift ivory doves cry out Dispelling the darkness as to wings they talk flight** Black ravens plague this existence Never cursed or full of deep blight Fleeting into the ebony night; for our love loses not insight No longer…*** Saturated in loneliness were you Emerging from the dust I was found intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains as the tempest rages in warm rains they know how our love does outshine with flickering light weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains; Held captive…** your genuine adoration still sustains Sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection For I am but a woman craving to be near you for all eternity I embrace you…you hold me tight Bound by love and affection My alleviation found in perfection and I shall feel this pure affection or you, my beloved…eternally And… A million fairy-tales tremble at us Completed 09/30/2019 Luloos poem with lines switched around for Her Switch-aro Poetry Contest My lines (allowed 5) marked with ** Note: This was not easy..I think I mastered copy, paste and delete lol

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Date: 12/23/2019 4:05:00 PM
Wow an awesome piece. Merry Christmas and best wishes for the new year. love phyl
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Date: 10/13/2019 10:30:00 PM
This is challenging and you rose to it, a very well constructed piece, Debra!
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Date: 9/30/2019 4:13:00 PM
Wow, I looked at this contest and thought no way. It didn't look easy and even though you also state it wasn't easy, you sure did make it look like it was. Best wishes in the contest Debra.
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Date: 9/30/2019 3:27:00 PM
Debra, good luck in the contest. I thought as I was reading this I recognized a lot of the lines. No wonder! Several have used them. Not me. I looked at this contest and said "no way!" Too difficult.
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Debra Squyres
Date: 9/30/2019 3:31:00 PM
It was difficult and I'm not sure I achieved even the goal of making sense.. lol Thanks for dropping by.

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