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Heavy Dew


heavy dew
clings to the branches--
monsoon season


note:
monsoons are rain storms common in Africa, Asia and Australia

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Carol Sunshine Brown

December 16, 2011 at 12:11 PM

Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours Phyllis. Love and blessings, Carol

Gwendolen Song

November 20, 2011 at 4:11 PM

Back for a RE READ!! lol. Such a great haiku. Gwendoeln

Nathan D.

November 20, 2011 at 10:34 AM

well done in the contest i am happy to see you doing well

Barbara Gorelick

November 19, 2011 at 5:31 PM

Well done..a tardy congrats to you. BG

Andrea Dietrich

November 17, 2011 at 3:08 PM

Phyllis, I am so HAPPY to see you with a big win here. Congratulations on your very well deserved win.

Phyllis Babcock

November 18, 2011 at 9:04 AM

Thanks you know how much i have been trying this form and now finally a winner-exciting.

Carol Sunshine Brown

November 17, 2011 at 11:05 AM

Congratulations Phyllis on your win in this Haiku contest of Debbie Guzzi. Love, Carol

Phyllis Babcock

November 18, 2011 at 9:03 AM

thanks Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

November 17, 2011 at 11:02 AM

oh! I'm from Asia, how well I could envision this, Phyllis :) I Love rain storms (ok minus the fact it being so destructive) but this really captures those sodden branches well... and thank you for passing by my haiku, I am happy the rose blooms brought you summer--- sunny smiles to you! and I see this won, very rightly so! Congrats to you! :D

Phyllis Babcock

November 18, 2011 at 9:02 AM

thanks Nikkio

Cyndi Macmillan

November 17, 2011 at 5:25 AM

Enjoyed this read, Phyllis. Congrats on the well deserved win. Glad I DON'T experience monsoons.Cheers, Cyndi

Phyllis Babcock

November 17, 2011 at 8:34 AM

Thanks Cyndi for your good wishes. Yes, we do not experience them either but have watched them in progress on nature shows.

Gwendolen Song

November 15, 2011 at 2:32 PM

Phyllis! Such a detailed picture of something seemingly insignificant , yet you turned the image into something gorgeous. I am so excited to see this as a top winner in Debbie's contest. It gives us a great example of what to strive for....yipeeee, yipeee! Gwendolen

Phyllis Babcock

November 15, 2011 at 8:19 PM

thanks Gwendolen it placed second and such a nice surprise for me

Carolyn Devonshire

November 15, 2011 at 12:30 PM

Awesome image in your haiku, Phyl. It seems like Florida has "monsoons" during hurricane season. I can relate to the picture you've created. Love, Carolyn

Phyllis Babcock

November 15, 2011 at 8:22 PM

thank you Carolyn and yes you would get that effect during hurricane season

Debbie Guzzi

November 15, 2011 at 8:45 AM

The MONSOON is Phyll's kigo for FALL..you just put the -- on the end of line 2 Phyll..great work thanks for taking us to a different part of the world! Congrad's

Phyllis Babcock

November 15, 2011 at 8:21 PM

thank you for my placement on your contest. You made my day.

Elizabeth Wesley

November 14, 2011 at 8:47 PM

I can smell the rain coming Phyllis, you handle this form so well.

Phyllis Babcock

November 14, 2011 at 8:57 PM

a form that I have struggled with. thanks

Judy Ball

November 14, 2011 at 5:05 PM

Ilike it. Don't know much about form and never cared much for strict form. I just know what sounds good and this works for me. God Bless, JB :)

Phyllis Babcock

November 14, 2011 at 8:58 PM

thanks Judy

November 14, 2011 at 10:08 AM

Hi Phyllis, I just want to comment regarding titles for haiku in response to a comment below. Normally, haiku are not titled. At the Soup you need a title to post the piece so the first line of the poem is usually the option I use or at least the first word or two. 5/7/5 is not longer in vogue for English haiku so your syllable count is fine. Nice use of imagery! Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Debbie Guzzi

November 13, 2011 at 6:36 PM

Phyll your title should be the first line..haiku are either numbered OR the first line is used as the title..Light & Love GOOD ONE!!!

Andrea Dietrich

November 13, 2011 at 4:22 PM

hahaha, I see john telling you to count 5/7/5. Doesn't he know about these contests going on around here using shorter lines?

Andrea Dietrich

November 13, 2011 at 4:21 PM

This is a nice little haiku expression, Phyllis. You even used shorter lines. If it's for Deb's, I hope she loves it!

John Loving Iii

November 13, 2011 at 3:39 PM

5-7-5 count your sylables in haiku's. john

Poet Destroyer A

November 13, 2011 at 12:54 PM

Good afternoon Phyllis, how are you this beautiful Sunday.. I would not mind a monsoon here in Texas.. We needed it... Does not matter the thickness... Enjoyed your haiku...p.d

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