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December. 11.2004
Haibun- Heaven or Hell Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Tom Woody

 

On a beautiful afternoon, crisp and sunny, I set out on a trek to the nearby woods. Except my camera, intentionally picked up, I hadn’t carried with me any other goods. All along, I saw wild flowers and strange herbs and paused to take pictures, but kept moving. No doubt, it was a rewarding experience. The lure of the unknown seemed bewitching. From the cluster of flowers on a sprawling tree, the wind wafted a rare exotic smell which I inhaled to my heart’s content. All along, I heard the twitter of chirping sparrows and some other birds and could spot large squirrels with striped designs and bushy tails. Proceeding further, heard a gurgling sound. It must be a small cataract, I did suppose. My guess was right. It fell off a rock and ran into a stream with murmur enough to lull one to sweet repose. The whistle of a quail fell in my ears and the rhythm of the tapping of a wood pecker and the creaking of dry leaves under my feet…all familiar sounds to any forest trekker! Feeling happy over my progress without a hitch, listening to the soft cajoling of birds and the confused drone of honey bees, I walked playfully stamping on the weeds.
woodland paths unwind bringing multi scenes in row~ joy to heart and soul
By the time I reached half my way, the forest fell into darkness much earlier to sunset. It shattered my peace and blotted out my sight, that I started running wild feeling violently upset. I knew I had strayed off the accustomed path, saw the dark sky above and heard a foreboding owl’s hoot. My path was severely obstructed by a tangle of creepers. I felt so puzzled that I could hear the loud thump of my heart. Under a thicket, covered with brambles, I saw a sudden movement as that of a beast and was afraid to look over my shoulders. My teeth chattered and my knees smote. I swooned unable to think or act, hear or see. For how long I lay there in a trance, not sure. When I woke, I saw myself lying at the foot of a tree. To my great relief, I saw the sun beams filtering down and an orange tint streaming across the foggy sky. I couldn’t say if I saw heaven or hell. Better to say, I experienced both.
unexpected turns, life takes, landing us in angst~ yet, add to our strength

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Date: 12/14/2024 7:55:00 AM
Amen, beautiful captivating writing, much Love and prayers for you and your family
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Date: 12/12/2024 5:04:00 AM
Excellent descriptiveness in all. The change from a pleasant stroll to the scary scenes of the second half was alluring. Thanks for sharing your contest entry with us. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 12/11/2024 12:17:00 PM
ahhh, you went both ways, heaven AND hell. Great descriptive writing, Valsa Well done
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Date: 12/11/2024 10:19:00 AM
Great poem.
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Date: 12/11/2024 10:04:00 AM
You are an amazing storyteller dear valsa! What a beautiful haibun! Everything about this is so engaging and so picturesque and your haikus too are amazing! I lov the way youv taken your readers on a journey through your well woven words here! So seamless and stunning! I especially loved the ending , how youv described the sun beams! How beautiful! This must have taken some time to writ as it seems just impeccable! Perfect prose and haiku; making it an excellent haibun! I think will be a top winner. It feels like youv done haibuns before too: my haibun was my first ever. Best wishes. And this definitely is a fave! Sending you light always
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Date: 12/11/2024 12:05:00 AM
There must be a point where they both meet Valsa. An enjoyable read, best of luck. Tom
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