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Heaven is for real contest 
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06/14/25 
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floating over fields my transport beam’s concealed ~ moribund paralysed all you that went before are in my dreams once more ~ no one vaporised loosely tethered our strings frayed and weathered ~ information’s ionised this ghost won’t deny phenomenons trick the eye ~ and i’m compromised from labour contractions–chemical reactions ~ through the stars baptised the cosmos true treasure is no mean measure ~ even death’s alchemised god sometimes goes unseen on fringes and off the screen ~ marginalised shining across fields his transport beam revealed ~ shaft of hope realised

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Date: 6/14/2025 11:12:00 AM
Beautiful mantras David, I was oohing and ahhing as I read and felt I was traversing, conversing, forward and reversing through the universe. Glimmers of persistent memory of maybe through the veil, into the magical/scientific explanation that becomes undone and inexplicable within any moment of realisation. An utterly gorgeous poem of all living condensed and expressed concisely. I'll say beautiful again I think, just need to :)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 6/14/2025 12:19:00 PM
Thank you Dilly, what a (beautiful) comment; I worked on this one like a cryptic crossword trying to equate one side with the other, you could indeed say they are all mantras, and read as such once you get the rhythm going lol! moments of realisation can be found in this universe, they may not explain everything, but might offer hope beyond mortality, cheers David
Date: 6/14/2025 10:17:00 AM
David, am I detecting a glimmer of reverence here? I do believe our chats have been productive after all ;) Beaming
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/14/2025 1:50:00 PM
But of course! (French accent)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 6/14/2025 1:28:00 PM
Temptation!!! Without condoning or condemning; I understand!
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/14/2025 12:30:00 PM
How could I resist?
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David Kavanagh
Date: 6/14/2025 11:09:00 AM
Now how did I know you might try capitalise on this one, I’m (Agnostic) not an Atheist, the universe is possibly infinite, which leaves plenty of room for a God in the heavens above, Beam me up! Cheers David

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