Heart Rust

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This poem was a tricky revision. It has an additional three beginning lines, but I wanted it to fit for a contest about rust. Which worked well as the ending image. This is truly Daily 40 and the first lines are

Ebony opened up and swallowed a night
Causing this year’s landslide
The worry pit filled
The oldest man drinks quick sips
Of the Ebony’s night poison
hoping that the meager amounts
wouldn’t accumulate in the soft organ tissue.

But the tricky gray emotions 
Would trickle up from the bog’s soil
Building in the heartier parts
of the man’s main pump--causing rust.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 12/30/2011 11:33:00 PM
This piece leaves a lot to the reader's individual imagination. I can interpret it one way while someone else may comprehend it differently.
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Date: 12/28/2011 8:12:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry this morning Autumn. I hope you will continue to write and share your poetry with us. Happy New Year. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/27/2011 8:33:00 PM
there's a sense of aloofness in your poems that I read so far Autumn yet the passionate heart is beating wildly! pretty profound, dear poet. thank you for stopping by and your kind comment
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