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8th April 2026

Heart Breaker

He said he'd give me the moon
One romantic afternoon
So I waited eagerly
For the moon to come to me
He gave the moon on bent knee
As it was made of paper
He received a heart breaker.

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Karen Jones

April 20, 2026 at 1:33 AM

Cute and well written!

Beryl Edmonds

April 20, 2026 at 2:00 AM

Thank you Karen… Beryl

Sara Kendrick

April 15, 2026 at 5:27 AM

I agree with Victor, the last line was a little scary, but I am thinking maybe it was an origami alligator made of folded paper that some people are so gifted to be able to make. Sara K..Creative work for the contest. Way to go.

Beryl Edmonds

April 15, 2026 at 10:59 AM

Hi Sara, I suppose the last word was scary, it was meant as a joke write and the last word rhymed. Have changed that last line to be more acceptable.Thank you, Beryl

Victor Buhagiar

April 15, 2026 at 1:51 AM

Your last line surprised me. I prefer a star for a moon. Best of luck.

Beryl Edmonds

April 15, 2026 at 2:07 AM

Thank you Victor… Beryl

Evelyn Judy Buehler

April 11, 2026 at 8:47 PM

Beryl, your lovely poem is a fine contender for the contest. Good luck. :)

Beryl Edmonds

April 11, 2026 at 11:38 PM

Thank you very much Evelyn.. Beryl

sara Etgen-Baker

April 9, 2026 at 4:44 PM

ah, paper promises. Well done for the contest, Beryl. Wishing you well.

Beryl Edmonds

April 10, 2026 at 10:21 AM

Than you very much Sara. Wishing you well too… Beryl

Daniel Henry Rodgers

April 9, 2026 at 4:30 PM

Dear Beryl, what a sharp, necessary bite in that ending. I’ve spent a lot of time sitting with the wreckage of "paper" promises, those grand, weightless gestures that look good on a sunny afternoon but offer no light once the sun actually goes down. When someone offers a hollow substitute for the real thing, they shouldn’t be surprised when the response has teeth. Blessings, Daniel

Beryl Edmonds

April 10, 2026 at 10:19 AM

Thank you Daniel, it is annoying when someone makes you a promise and that promise is never fulfilled. One can get over the disappointment, but they will never forget. Blessings returned… Beryl

Paula Goldsmith

April 9, 2026 at 10:05 AM

Your "Paper Moon" is a creative write. I enjoyed reading. Great Ending... "Good Luck" I also did this contest. Have a great day writing away.............

Beryl Edmonds

April 9, 2026 at 11:02 AM

Thank you Paula, have read the poem you wrote for the contest, I’ve left a comment, loved your write… Beryl

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