Heart Break



Chill winds surge atop placid lake
Reflections of rapture shattered 
My hope of redemption laying in shards
Tears flow, dreams end in desolation

A tempest beats against the keep
The palisade of my heart overwhelmed
My hope of atonement laying in fragments
Tears flow, dreams end in despair

The tumult rakes silent green forest
Stillness of soul severed carelessly  
My hope of expiation laying in wreckage
Tears flow, dreams end in desperation 

Maelstrom tears asunder grey sky
Mind reals devastated, images deluge
My hope of salvation laying in tatters
Tears flow, dreams end in defeat

I am forlorn!
I am alone!
I am lost!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 2/7/2015 12:22:00 PM
Perchance truth lies silently within such words as these, waiting to be released by the magic of a poet's dream. Wonderful work with great feeling spurring deep emotion! Emile #7
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Shane Cooper
Date: 2/8/2015 2:11:00 PM
Thank you Emile for your kind words. I seem to keep falling back into the same place with my poems of late, I am not in a happy place. love Shane
Date: 2/6/2015 6:44:00 AM
You write graciously and wonderfully. Its blissful coming across this piece. There's nothing more than I can say other than, this is simply awesome and great
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Shane Cooper
Date: 2/6/2015 7:12:00 AM
thank you for your kind words, I appreciate your stopping by. love Shane xxx
Date: 1/29/2015 12:05:00 PM
So nice to read your verse today. Light & Love
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/29/2015 12:12:00 PM
Thank you Debbie for dropping by. Love Shane xxx
Date: 1/28/2015 5:58:00 PM
you captured very well the feeling of sadness with this poem. Very nicely portrayed.
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 7:45:00 PM
Thank you Andrea. I am glad you had time to read it. I always seem to drop back into the dark when i get upset. Maybe some of Jan's humour may rub off on me one day and give me a better option. love Shane xxx
Date: 1/28/2015 3:56:00 PM
You have painted a dark picture and one that I have experienced, and it is about as bad as bad can be. I have no advice. You will work it out by yourself.
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 4:30:00 PM
Thank you for stopping in. I am in and out of this depression for so many years now. Maybe poetrysoup and the community here will be my lifeline. One can only hope. Shane xxx
Date: 1/28/2015 12:50:00 PM
You took us to a dark place Shane..your imagery reeled me in as we got deeper inside your emotions.... Well done
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 4:43:00 PM
It wears us all down. Work family friends and keeping up with the Jones' on soup. It is a gruelling schedule we set for ourselves. No real ME time to be had is not good for the soul. Shane xxx
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Tim Smith
Date: 1/28/2015 4:23:00 PM
Welcome to my world...I work nights so barely get any sleep during the week and only can sleep in every other weekend.. When I'm not with my kids but even then I have activities with them
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 4:20:00 PM
As you can see I am not on a roll at the moment. I have posted the wrong reply to you. Possibly i need more than the two hours shut eye I get now days. I thank you for stopping in to read my poem. I do enjoy your writing and am looking forward to reading more. Shane xxx
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 4:05:00 PM
Thank you for taking the time to read my work. Your poem "Home of my childhood" really touched me and brought back memories of childhhood and home for me. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. It all does seem a little daunting to this new comer to soup i am lucky that Jan took me under her wing and collaborated on four poems with me. I am really missing her input and humor now. love Shane xxx
Date: 1/28/2015 8:35:00 AM
Shane, your poem is deep with emotion, it holds a great sadness, you have written well and thanks for visiting my poetry and for your kind words ~~
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/28/2015 4:15:00 PM
Thank you for taking the time to read my work. Your poem "Home of my childhood" really touched me and brought back memories of childhhood and home for me. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. It seems a little daunting to this new comer to soup i am lucky that Jan took me under her wing and collaborated on four poems with me. I am really missing her input and humor now. love Shane xxx
Date: 1/26/2015 2:26:00 PM
It is at these time, my dear friend, when we are most vulnerable that new dreams, new hopes, new life are born anew . . . through death their is resurrection. be strong and courageous dear friend . . . their is light and love waiting for you. 7
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/26/2015 2:37:00 PM
Thank you david for your kind words, I have read your poem wind from the sea and know that you are a caring person as well as a talented poet. I appreciate your thoughts Shane xxx
Date: 1/26/2015 1:13:00 PM
- Oh .... a heartbreaking poem Shane - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/26/2015 1:19:00 PM
I am not really in a good place, putting pen to paper and letting the words free helps. thank you for taking the time to read. love Shane xxx
Date: 1/26/2015 11:43:00 AM
Albeit very sad,the poem is really well - penned and very appealing to the senses! Keep it up,Shane Cooper !
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/26/2015 1:13:00 PM
thank you for your kind words. It was written from the heart.
Date: 1/26/2015 6:36:00 AM
Very sad and deep write
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Shane Cooper
Date: 1/26/2015 6:44:00 AM
I am feeling very blue and I needed to put it into words. It always helps. Thank you for reading. Shane cxx
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