He Was My Sun

He was my sun, my one and only son,
attired as a cowboy for the day. 
And so I handed him a little gun
of fastened random sticks, for him to shoot and play.

Attired as a cowboy for the day
he searched for foes (with bows and arrows made
of fastened random sticks for them) to shoot, and play        
the part of ‘Injuns’ in a mock charade.

He searched for foes (with bows and arrows made)
well written in his story books before he left for school.
The parts of ‘Injuns’ in a mock charade
were tainted with a crimson war paint, oh so cruel.

Well writ in history books before he left from school,
the tales (retold of victories that we’d won)
were tainted with a crimson war paint, oh so cruel.
The flow of paint was not to staunch when once begun.

From tales retold of victories that we’d won,
he learned to fight for God and country glory, though
the flow of pain, ’twas not to staunch when once begun
and bane to both sides (as he’d later come to know).

He learned to fight for God and country glory, though
the wounds of war were kept unseen (while nigh) 
and bane to both sides (as we’d later come to know);
but still he stuffed a duffel bag with several things of youth, then said goodbye.

The wounds of war were kept unseen. While nigh,
the hours boomed, the clock struck 12 at last, his time to leave.
But, still, he stuffed a duffel bag with several things of youth, then said goodbye
to those who’d stay and even those who wouldn’t grieve.

The hours boomed, the clock struck 12 - alas, his time to leave.
They sent back body bags they’d stuffed with severed things of those who’d died
to those who’d stayed. And even those who wouldn’t grieve
with tears were stiff and masked like wooden boxes meant to hide.

They sent back body bags they’d stuffed with severed things of those who’d died;
his boots hung loose, one camouflaged in mud.
With tears, the stiff were masked in wooden boxes meant to hide
our children from the spilling of their blood.

His boots hung loose, one camouflaged in mud;
they said they’d needed him to help defend
our children from the spilling of their blood.
But can they ever see or really comprehend?

They said they’d needed him to help defend,
and so they handed him a little gun.
But can they ever see or really comprehend?
He was my sun, my one and only son.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Black Blacharczyk Avatar
February 17, 2016 at 4:45 PM
Your imagery brings my soul into your poem. Well written
Turner Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 1:40 PM
Brilliant work of rhyming and story telling. Compelling!
Du Temple Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 1:23 PM
Your excellent choice of the Pantoum form brought forth an innocence of youth that moved to fateful future, from the use of playful to the use of poignant repetition, that melded with the theme - play can lead to mortality one day and it leaves us with a silence of knowing with despair. It could bring wounded worriers to tears.
Mccallum Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 1:22 PM
Fantastic work. We Irish seem suited to the task of poetry.
Ward Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 7:44 AM
Powerful - thanks for sharing.
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:12 AM
Thank you, Julia... I've read and enjoyed several of your poems... unfortunately, comments have been turned off...
Allison Avatar
November 2, 2015 at 2:14 PM
such a moving story many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:15 AM
Thank you, Jan!
A  Avatar
November 2, 2015 at 11:47 AM
Terry, awesome win. SKAT
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:15 AM
Thank you, Skat!
Negron Flores Avatar
November 2, 2015 at 10:40 AM
Congratulations in your win.
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:13 AM
Thank you, Nayda
Onclaud Avatar
November 2, 2015 at 10:23 AM
my, i like this form but it is so challenging!... you did this so effortlessly, teary.. big congrats
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:13 AM
Thank you, Nette!
A  Avatar
July 4, 2015 at 11:46 PM
Terry, CONGRATULATIONS, on having your poem featured on the soup's home page. Enjoy the coming week. Take Care ~SKAT~
O'Leary Avatar
November 6, 2015 at 6:14 AM
Thank you, Skat!
Collins Avatar
July 18, 2014 at 8:29 AM
Dear Terry - Without new fodder I had to go back. Of course my pointer found the saddest one. Plastic cowboys and Indians seemed so benign to a four year old. No excuses now, bows to missiles. love you, Kathy
Manassian Avatar
May 25, 2013 at 4:03 AM
How movingly sad....who can justify this???? This is happening daily where I live....very heart wrentching piece.
Hicks Avatar
May 6, 2013 at 11:34 PM
WOW! You have touched me yet again with your fabulous writing skills. I love how you took the make belief of cowboys and Indians to the real world of war and blood shed. You've mastered this difficult form to a tee and brought it back full circle with ease. Faving this one!
Wesley Avatar
April 11, 2013 at 5:43 PM
Amazing form you've mastered here and the story cut to the bone. You put me on an emotional rollercoaster with everything you write Terry. Luv, Lizzie
Kovacs Avatar
January 20, 2013 at 11:56 AM
This is very beautiful. I would like to learn how to write in the form you used.
Williams Avatar
December 15, 2012 at 8:15 PM
This is very sad, but yet awesome. Very good write.
Tsiluma Avatar
December 14, 2012 at 1:00 AM
Amazing write Terry! The devastation war causes continues to wreak havoc in families. It’s ironic ‘they’ say that they need to protect the children and yet it is the same children they send out to fight a war in the guise of keeping peace. Very well written poem. I love how you’ve used the form to tackle an ever growing atrocity.
Irwin Avatar
December 7, 2012 at 8:28 AM
Wow, very nice Terry.
Guzzi Avatar
December 6, 2012 at 6:14 PM
very provacative, the THEY don't care we are just pawns, cannon fodder..it's beyond sad..great write... Light & Love
Kearley Avatar
November 20, 2012 at 6:24 PM
The pain in my heart has left me blank...Very well written...Geez!
Duncan Avatar
November 19, 2012 at 9:56 PM
Awesome words Terry,,,, is this truly you and yours ? My tears rolled around the 7th stanza,, I think these very thoughts as I read or see " WAR" of any period in man's history. All for a piece of dirt,, but they still stand " tall". Sad but awesome write ,,,,,,,
May Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 7:59 PM
well penned. Terry....very touching story.....luv.
Kovrlija Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 10:00 AM
beautiful, deep poem
Horne Avatar
November 10, 2012 at 2:42 PM
wow, this is just excellent, Terry
Horsman Avatar
November 10, 2012 at 10:16 AM
saw this on Mandy's site, first Terry, an absolute stunning poem... full of realism, and truths....a classic poem this is...
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