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He Was

He was a big man a gigantic tall man a large imposing brute of a man a do whatever he wants to do man He was a I can do anything man a you better get out of my way man a stand up walk shake the ground man a ready for battle boisterous man a several severed heads on sticks man Then one day he faced a somewhat small man a not very tall man a gentle weak looking shepherd man But this was a special man an I’m with God I can do anything man Still Goliath was a mocking man laughing at the small stone twirling boy man Unimpressed with that steady on shaking ground man That not backing down weakling loinclothed man One big one small oddly paired historic men Destined born to come together men Who changed the course of history men Story recounted retold from back then Scribed by Scholars with paper and pen Rock against sword one bigger by ten David stood with God his nation to defend on simple armor he didn’t depend With odds against him one hundred times ten In the end it was Goliath that would never stand again!

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/27/2020 4:44:00 PM

It was lovely to read this one again, dear. Full of spiritual nourishment. You might want to give my poem another read. I've posted an audio file to it....a file of my reading of the poem.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/27/2020 4:47:00 PM

On my way.

Michelo Mweetwa

Date: 10/19/2019 9:39:00 AM

Another demonstration of your versatility. Great poem!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2019 10:54:00 AM

Thanks Michelo. Cool name, tell me about it.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 9/3/2019 6:01:00 AM

Nice repetitious words man. I cool way of retelling the tale; for in the end Goliath was the never to get up again kind of a man lol. Richard, I did watch a theological archeologist point out that because of Goliath's unnaturally large size for those times indicated that he had some sort of brain to body ratio problem, and so had a soft point if hit would kill him. Also, that where David came from folks still use slings and are damn good shots.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 9/3/2019 9:43:00 AM

I agree. All that weight and the fate of all put upon a boy's shoulders took miraculous courage.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2019 7:43:00 AM

Thanks Jeff, I appreciate you exploring my poetry. ;0). Sometimes people wish to take away from the miraculous. For me the miracle was the courage David had in facing Goliath.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/3/2018 10:53:00 AM

Hopefully, having god on our side means that we are empathetic, fair, honorable, and with some self-control. If this is what it means, then I am all for it!! You retell the story very effectively. It could also be a metaphor for how superior technology allows one to win in the end. Swords have more than two edges.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2019 7:43:00 AM

Thanks Duke, interesting thoughts.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/12/2018 11:35:00 PM

You COULD sell this, I think, marketed to Church teen-aimed Sunday School Classes. It captivates from the get go and catching teenage attention is a sought accomplishment. I think. Loved it, may I buy it? Seriously, after it captivated me it held me, and already know the story (smiling). Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2018 9:28:00 AM

You are sweet Cay Cay. Thanks!

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/12/2018 2:12:00 PM

When God is on our side, we can accomplish the seemingly impossible. Hope you're doing ok, Rick. Hope you pick your pen back up.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2018 9:34:00 AM

So true but not experienced on a regular enough basis. Perhaps a lack of faith or desire by us. Thanks for asking, I am doing well. Lots going on at the moment.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/12/2018 12:22:00 PM

OH! Have you not posted since? Why? You have been to so many interesting places. I'm sure that you have lots to write about. Come on now...I'm waiting for a new one. You told me to let you know when I have a new blog up...well, go and check it out. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2018 9:34:00 AM

On my way. Also I have posted a new one.

John Hamilton

Date: 10/11/2018 2:04:00 PM

Great title Rick drew me in, so well said, so big and strong and yet no challenge for the God fearing shepherd boy. Lots of modern day applications can be made.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2018 9:51:00 AM

Thanks John.

Vegter Papyrus

Date: 10/10/2018 10:59:00 AM

I love the parable. No matter how big problems seem, they are solvable with a working and fighting faith. Fear is debilitating. God's work being glorified...salute!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2018 9:51:00 AM

Thanks Keith.

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/6/2018 6:34:00 PM

WoW! Richard, I've never read the story of David and Goliath quite like this before. I really enjoyed the read. I missed reading your remarkable pen:-) Alexis

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/6/2018 2:07:00 PM

Hi Richard, you have written this biblical tale in such a wonderful fashion, one can say, in a Richard fashion. Your work is always so interesting. I love the modern content. You bring an ancient story into the modern age in an excellent way. Your creativity shines my friend. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon

Date: 10/5/2018 5:58:00 PM

Lovely! A skillfully recounted biblical reality. Love always, dear friend. Adeniji

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 10/5/2018 8:48:00 AM

Nice rephrasing the historic event in beautiful way. this is also in Quran. thanks for sharing Hope you are good and doing well

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/1/2018 10:51:00 AM

I once met a person in Australia, from Ethiopia, a christian who actually knew, someone who could trace their ancestry right back to David the one whom you write of in this splendid poem. as for form, why not 'Mono rhyme' there are many versions of such..and yes i like this a lot..

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/27/2018 4:11:00 PM

I like this one; you've penned an old story in a modern-day way that just fits the reader's needs. Well done.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/26/2018 10:39:00 AM

Real cool and inspirational timeless poem, Mr. Lamoure. Beautiful story retold w/poetic passion. Aurora bright poetry, my dear friend. Love and joy always.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/24/2018 9:38:00 AM

A message from God to David that has resounded for all the ages that people would be bullied for their beliefs. A good read, Rick!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/25/2018 11:55:00 PM

Thanks Ralph.

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/23/2018 8:12:00 PM

Richard, such an awesome, compelling and poetic re-telling of the courage displayed by David against Goliath and paganism. Superb! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/23/2018 11:55:00 PM

Thanks Susan.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/23/2018 9:48:00 AM

Amen, dear....well written. There comes a crazy kind of courage that only God can provide. Enjoyed this.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/23/2018 11:51:00 PM

That is true. ;0)