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He Strokes Her Face

Beneath the gaze
of watchful eyes
she sits and cries.
The fairies pry

and wring their hands.
The wind goes by
with anguished sigh
he strokes her face.


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This form is a "pathya vat".
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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/8/2014 4:36:00 PM

Sometimes when we are brought to tears that is when those around us are most loving and attentive... striking poem.. The bit "the faeries pry...and wring their hands..." is an original and intriguing bit..Love this. Always,Laura

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2014 5:03:00 PM

Thank you for the insightful look into this poem, Laura; your comments are lovely and very welcome. // paul

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/23/2014 2:09:00 AM

This an ingenius way to attribute affection to the Wind Paul, super original and sentimental. What breaks a man's heart more than a woman crying? I also wanted to tell you that your recent collaboration with Kelly is very moving and graceful. A seamless collaboration, very impressive. J.A.B.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/23/2014 9:54:00 AM

Thank you Justin for your understanding of my poem. You spot the most essential. // I am very pleased with my collaboration with Kelly; she is a lovely person and fun to work with. // paul

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 8/20/2014 6:04:00 PM

Short and beautiful. Great poem. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Paul Callus
Date: 8/21/2014 4:48:00 PM

Hi Lucilla; I only know a few phrases in Spanish, although I understand quite a few words thanks to my knowledge of Italian. My sister speaks and teaches Spanish, though. In the family we all have languages at heart. take care. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 8/21/2014 3:29:00 PM

Gracias Lucilla! It is always a pleasure for me to have you stopping by. Take care. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/19/2014 4:39:00 AM

You have the Midas touch when creating a poem that will touch the heart Paul. I loved this offering and the form it was written in.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2014 10:43:00 PM

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Paul Callus
Date: 8/20/2014 7:13:00 PM

Thank you Connie. You are too kind....wish I had the Midas touch where poetry is concerned! So glad that you enjoyed it. (Yesterday I replied to this comment, but now I have just realized that my reply has disappeared!! Wonder what happened!) Hope aches and pains are bearable; take care. // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/14/2014 11:37:00 AM

excellent poem Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 8/18/2014 11:19:00 AM

Thank you Harry, both for the visit and 'excellent' comment. // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/14/2014 7:57:00 AM

Short, soothing and sweet my friend. Interesting form and you did so very well...

Paul Callus
Date: 8/18/2014 11:18:00 AM

Thank you Robert; so glad you find this to your liking. [Back from holiday and trying to catch up on people and writes!] // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/7/2014 5:46:00 PM

Soft,gentle and beautiful...Somehow brimgs comfort to a face holding tears..To my fvs.I.never tried this form..Love (ly)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 6:29:00 PM

Hi Charm! Thank you for the fav and lovely adjectives and comments. You are too kind:) This is a new form to me, but it is an excellent tool to work with. In your hands it would craft wonders. I have no doubt about it. Goodnight. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/7/2014 2:01:00 PM

wowowowowo!! that effect you produce............... mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmn.. great!!!! so vulnerable. :) God bless Paul from me olive eloisa.. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 2:19:00 PM

Hi Olive_eloi!:) This is a lovely surprise (from Manila, I presume). So I take it that you like this poem.....'vulnerable' is a fitting adjective that you have well used. You would have enjoyed having a go at this "pathya vat"...right up your street. Maybe I'll inspire you, this time, although you too are short of time at the moment:) Take care and God bless. // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/7/2014 12:21:00 PM

gentle is your pondering like a wind sighing, paul... not for my contest?... awwhhh!.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 2:01:00 PM

Hi Nette! It is so lovely to have you stopping by [hope you hadn't been nettled by my friendly limerick:)] Thank you for the lovely comments on this poem which I wrote inspired by your contest. Unfortunately your theme is different to this one, so unless my muse visits tonight I'll run out of time as I'm off to Paris for a week's holiday. Hugs and take care. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/7/2014 9:24:00 AM

beautifully created Paul with lovely imagery: -) Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 10:55:00 AM

Hi Jan! You are always one of the first to visit my new posts; thank you for the support and the lovely comments that go with it:) Hugs. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/7/2014 8:34:00 AM

- Paul, a small piece of artwork - beautiful! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 10:45:00 AM

Thank you Anne Lise! So glad you enjoyed this little poem. [will be going on holiday this Saturday night...Paris calling!] /x/ paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/7/2014 8:20:00 AM

The wind has always been a friend to me, Paul. When I go for rides...I stick my head out the window to get the full feel of that liberating caress. Lovely write...SO sweet.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2014 10:39:00 AM

Fairies and wind together provide the stage for rustic pastoral fantasy. The idea was to keep it tenderly sweet and simple; hope I managed that. Thank you, Eileen, for your much appreciated support. // paul