He Crowed the Night

The sound of the cicadas, piercing in the darkness, dree ...
They massed thunderous, unobserved sounds nocturnal, dree ...
crashing through the high it ... of and in .. wild ... disturbed, dree ...
In alarm the crow forgot him, the other, the sand, the surf
and the sixty gray rocks below the tree tops there

A friend was he of daylight, his special ways taught all.
but, the first move was black, now cut against 
the too far off feet of that night. 

It is the other thing he never could cry over ... death




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There you go Charlotte ;)


In the darkness there is death.

It was the first thing that they taught him and he never forgot it he could move unobserved in daylight too; in other ways. But the night was his special friend.

Now the high piercing sound of the alarm cut through all other nocturnal sounds: the dree dree dree of the cicadas, the thunderous crashing of the surf against the gray sand and the black rocks, sixty feet below, the wild cry of a disturbed crow far off over the massed tree tops.

By Eric V. Lustbader The Ninja
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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March 31, 2014 at 10:20 PM
DEBBIE, Congratulations :) awesome winning poem..... XOX ~LINDA
Strand Avatar
March 31, 2014 at 1:49 AM
Thank you Debbie for your always welcome comments on my endeavours.I only write in structured prose now as it sems to fit best with recitation thereof ,which I feel is the natural conclusion for every poem (of whatever form).Congrats on your blog on faith .Rgds Brian
Torres Avatar
March 28, 2014 at 10:37 AM
This is a brilliant piece, CArrie.. Congratulations on your fine win!! :'))
Gildersleeve Avatar
March 26, 2014 at 6:22 PM
You've constructed this poem brilliantly. Nicely done and a well deserved win. Congratulations Debbie - Connie
Mehta Avatar
March 26, 2014 at 6:16 AM
Very creative to pen a collage poem and congrats on the win, debbie
Walker  Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 11:04 PM
Well done Debbie and Congrats on win. Verlena
Jones Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 10:18 PM
Wow...rearranged with style....congratulations debbie
Puddifoot Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 6:35 PM
debbie, you did so well with this one! surreal, but with some coherence at the same time; you created a definite mood with the arranged words, which was what I was looking for - congrats on your win in my contest :)
Guzzi Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 7:34 PM
I cut out all the words and laid them on a black board and sorted by noun verb adjective preposition etc. & went from there ;)
Richards Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 5:25 PM
Wasn't this fun??!!! I loved this idea of trying to make sense of random words/sentences.. A fun contest, and your is stunning!
Stephens Avatar
March 25, 2014 at 5:12 PM
Hi Debbie, Enjoyed reading it. cleverly constructed. Regards Theresa xx
Anish Avatar
March 21, 2014 at 1:47 PM
Nice "call and response" work here. I remember the Cicadas of summer! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Dietrich Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 9:50 PM
Way to be inspired, Debs!! Long time, no see!!
Pettit Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 3:01 AM
Cicadas are very loud during those summer nights. You have described everything here decently well the way you usually do. Good job Debbie.
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