Nette Onclaud Poet Sijo

He Comes Secretly

Beaded tresses and silk kimono rustle with finesse,
Her geisha heels tapping restlessly on moist Yakasa weeds
From  an enchi...there he comes secretly, through groans of monks’ bells


*enchi---Japanese garden


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Brian Strand

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Janis Medders Tobechi June 4, 2017 at 11:02 PM This is all so mystic and beautiful. Wonderful Eastern images. Congratulations on your high placement.

Gregory Richard Barden June 3, 2017 at 3:25 AM I love this, Nette, the rhythm and tone, and I have always been fascinated with Japanese culture ... wonderful work, and congrats on your win! :-)

Dean Wood June 2, 2017 at 11:47 PM Very pretty Nette. Congratulations on your high placement with this beauty. - Dean

Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2017 at 10:06 PM Love this, Nette!

Danesh Morgan September 8, 2013 at 9:28 PM splendid Congrats on your win. Morgan

Olusegun Arowolo September 8, 2013 at 9:46 AM Awesome piece,Superb write......Congrats on your win,Nette...

Shadow Hamilton September 8, 2013 at 5:34 AM super poem Nettie congrats on win Shadow x smile

Skat A September 7, 2013 at 9:04 PM Congratulations, Nette, in Debbie's awesome contest....... SKAT

Sandra Adams September 7, 2013 at 7:47 PM just love this poem of yours...congrats on your win with this outstanding poem!

Carrie Richards September 7, 2013 at 6:38 PM One wants to tiptoe through your poem! Congratulations, Nette!

Debbie Guzzi September 7, 2013 at 5:54 PM I could feel the softness of the ground! How cool is that! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Dr.Ram Mehta September 7, 2013 at 5:36 AM Congrats on the win

Poet Destroyer A September 7, 2013 at 4:55 AM nette..l9ve the win....pd

Andrea Dietrich September 6, 2013 at 10:57 PM wowie, zowie, THIS is so awesome. So far I am loving Deb's lineup!! (glad I even got on the list with yours and Carrie's at the top being so great!) Congrats.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl September 6, 2013 at 7:28 PM Congratulations nette xx

Richard Lamoureux September 6, 2013 at 5:04 PM Beautiful! Congratulations.

Sara Kendrick September 6, 2013 at 2:53 PM Congrats on your great win..Sara

Cherie Thomas August 27, 2013 at 12:01 PM I like this form, very lovely read....cherie

Lucilla Carrillo August 25, 2013 at 11:36 AM This is nice. I think that to walk softly - only geishas have the art to do that. Are the Geishas still around? love the poem thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest...... Lucilla

Wayland Bunch August 25, 2013 at 7:41 AM Nice I think I am even inclined to check this form out. Good work.

Constance La France August 20, 2013 at 1:55 PM Nette, this is a beautiful Sijo Poem, well done and I want to thank you so much for selecting my poem Painted Horses Leaping in your Carousel In Roundel Contest for 2nd place, I am so honoured. Constance

Kash Poet August 20, 2013 at 1:54 PM Phillipines is very nearer to Japan:))This is a wonderful Sijo Nette.Love this.

Chris Boskovski August 19, 2013 at 9:07 PM Very well written Poem! I love it, waiting for your love in secret, awsome, a Japanese Romeo and Juliet I presume! Great poem! from your fellow poet.... Christopher :)

Charmaine Chircop August 19, 2013 at 4:33 PM Deborah is going to fall in love with this beauty..Im sure : )

Andrea Dietrich August 19, 2013 at 3:39 PM wow,this is one of the best I've seen. One sure to please DEBS!! thanks for my place in your contest, Nette. I read all the winning poems. So many good ones you inspired.

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