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He Comes Secretly

Beaded tresses and silk kimono rustle with finesse, Her geisha heels tapping restlessly on moist Yakasa weeds From an enchi...there he comes secretly, through groans of monks’ bells *enchi---Japanese garden ----------------------- Brian Strand

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Janis Thompson

Date: 6/4/2017 11:02:00 PM

This is all so mystic and beautiful. Wonderful Eastern images. Congratulations on your high placement.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 6/3/2017 3:25:00 AM

I love this, Nette, the rhythm and tone, and I have always been fascinated with Japanese culture ... wonderful work, and congrats on your win! :-)

Dean Wood

Date: 6/2/2017 11:47:00 PM

Very pretty Nette. Congratulations on your high placement with this beauty. - Dean

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/2/2017 10:06:00 PM

Love this, Nette!

Danesh Morgan

Date: 9/8/2013 9:28:00 PM

splendid Congrats on your win. Morgan

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/8/2013 9:46:00 AM

Awesome piece,Superb write......Congrats on your win,Nette...

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/8/2013 5:34:00 AM

super poem Nettie congrats on win Shadow x smile

Skat A

Date: 9/7/2013 9:04:00 PM

Congratulations, Nette, in Debbie's awesome contest....... SKAT

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/7/2013 7:47:00 PM

just love this poem of yours...congrats on your win with this outstanding poem!

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/7/2013 6:38:00 PM

One wants to tiptoe through your poem! Congratulations, Nette!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/7/2013 5:54:00 PM

I could feel the softness of the ground! How cool is that! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/7/2013 5:36:00 AM

Congrats on the win

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/7/2013 4:55:00 AM

nette..l9ve the win....pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2013 10:57:00 PM

wowie, zowie, THIS is so awesome. So far I am loving Deb's lineup!! (glad I even got on the list with yours and Carrie's at the top being so great!) Congrats.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 9/6/2013 7:28:00 PM

Congratulations nette xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/6/2013 5:04:00 PM

Beautiful! Congratulations.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/6/2013 2:53:00 PM

Congrats on your great win..Sara

Cherie Thomas

Date: 8/27/2013 12:01:00 PM

I like this form, very lovely read....cherie

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 8/25/2013 11:36:00 AM

This is nice. I think that to walk softly - only geishas have the art to do that. Are the Geishas still around? love the poem thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest...... Lucilla

Wayland Bunch

Date: 8/25/2013 7:41:00 AM

Nice I think I am even inclined to check this form out. Good work.

Constance La France

Date: 8/20/2013 1:55:00 PM

Nette, this is a beautiful Sijo Poem, well done and I want to thank you so much for selecting my poem Painted Horses Leaping in your Carousel In Roundel Contest for 2nd place, I am so honoured. Constance

Kash Poet

Date: 8/20/2013 1:54:00 PM

Phillipines is very nearer to Japan:))This is a wonderful Sijo Nette.Love this.

Chris Boskovski

Date: 8/19/2013 9:07:00 PM

Very well written Poem! I love it, waiting for your love in secret, awsome, a Japanese Romeo and Juliet I presume! Great poem! from your fellow poet.... Christopher :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/19/2013 4:33:00 PM

Deborah is going to fall in love with this beauty..Im sure : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2013 3:39:00 PM

wow,this is one of the best I've seen. One sure to please DEBS!! thanks for my place in your contest, Nette. I read all the winning poems. So many good ones you inspired.