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He swings his arms and strides ahead She walks three steps behind The center of the universe Cares not what’s on her mind The bacon? Oh, he brings it home Though she works longer hours He smiles and sees his savings grow But what she earns is “ours” One day he’ll leave; she’s sure of that Because he tells her so She, too, oft’ thinks of leaving home But has no cash to go A prisoner within his world The dreams she once had died The man she loved will never know How many times she’s cried August 26, 2019 For Silent One's "If You Only Knew" Contest

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Date: 9/24/2019 10:00:00 AM
This is simply amazing. I love it so... I'm favoriting it for certain. Blessings and happy writing to you
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Date: 9/19/2019 6:29:00 PM
Oh he knows how many times she's cried, he just doesn't care. He figures she will "just get over it". As you say,"The center of the universe cares not what's on her mind." Excellent piece my friend. Happens all too often in too many lives. God Bless, JB
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Date: 9/12/2019 8:39:00 AM
That was a fantastic poem. Relatable to so many women.
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Date: 9/12/2019 1:44:00 AM
Sadly there are so many narcisstic relationships. I was in one and could relate to powerfully written poem
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Date: 9/10/2019 9:51:00 PM
The ease and flow of this write belies the message within. A powerful piece ~
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Date: 9/8/2019 6:36:00 PM
So sad but true...Very nicely rendered Carolyn..
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Date: 9/7/2019 1:53:00 PM
I see as well that you placed in the contest. I am not surprised, congrats.
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Date: 9/7/2019 1:52:00 PM
Thanks Carolyn for such a sensitive response.
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Date: 9/6/2019 9:19:00 PM
This is a wonderful but sad write Carolyn, congrats on a fine win!
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Date: 9/3/2019 5:49:00 PM
Hello Carolyn Devonshire, I feel so sorry for the girl. It is sad it had to be that way for her. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 9/3/2019 6:28:00 AM
This poem reaches out to many irrespective of time, place, religion and any such differences. Numerous people live a life of this sort. I feel it takes many more centuries to walk together :/
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Date: 9/2/2019 9:41:00 PM
Well, I lived in Texas for many years and there the people would say, "he needs killing." I know your poem speaks a truth many live, a truth I pray they sooner rather than later work with the universe to exit. A poetically written, dramatic lined poem that emotively reaches out and successfully touches. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 9/1/2019 8:10:00 PM
This is so well written Carolyn. A timeless sad story that you have touched with grace. Message is loud and clear. Congratulations. A fave for me.
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Date: 9/1/2019 2:47:00 PM
A sad tale of a very unhappy person - being trapped in such a relationship is awful - wish she had packed her bags and left this selfish man. A wonderful gem, is this poem. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 8/31/2019 3:12:00 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Carolyn :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/31/2019 12:57:00 PM
Oh, my what a realization! So glad you shared this, it is an eye-opening, heart rending piece. You stated it so well with these gorgeous "couple"ts. Congratulations, Sunshine, perfect for the prompt.
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Date: 8/30/2019 6:00:00 PM
I remember how much I loved this one. Congrats on your GREAT win , dear.
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Date: 8/29/2019 11:31:00 PM
You have captured the battered spirit, that belongs to many women whose husband's make sure they don't have the funds to leave, in poetic perfection Carolyn! A Fave for me! Congratulations on your placement! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/29/2019 4:02:00 PM
So many couples are in this kind of relationship, i was talking to a lady about it today... who had been through this.. nice take on the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 8/29/2019 7:32:00 AM
You have described my mom when she was with my father. It’s true no one knew. We lived in a family of secrets. This is very well expressed. It should do very well. Bravo!
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Date: 8/30/2019 3:40:00 PM
That's really sad, Richard. My heart goes out to your mother.
Date: 8/28/2019 9:12:00 AM
An indirect call for help. I was very moved to sadness!
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Date: 8/26/2019 10:51:00 PM
Hello Carolyn … this is a great poem although full of sadness and despair. So many find themselves in this horrible situation - thank you Carolyn - Lindsay
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Date: 8/26/2019 6:21:00 PM
wow, i love love this one, Carolyn. I have watched enough ID tv to know how prevalent this is just in OUR country alone. Then add to it the radical machismo in other countries. FAVE
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Date: 8/26/2019 4:41:00 PM
Dear Carolyn, I've been touched by this poem which alas tackles a topic to which many women can relate. I am sure the sponsor will have no difficulty in declaring this entry a winner! Hugs // paul
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Date: 8/26/2019 3:37:00 PM
'She' could use an introduction to the 'Me Too' movement!! :) gw
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