Home » Poems » Marie Harrison » ...Hawaii's Fireworks

...Hawaii's Fireworks

Hawaii's fireworks red white and blue sparks in air volcano exploding

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/6/2010 12:51:00 PM

Oh my! How creative, Marie. Congrats on your win! Love, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/6/2010 8:31:00 AM

Congratulations Marie on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Fireworks". Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/6/2010 1:58:00 AM

I loved that last line! Gave it a different feel--congrats, Marie :) --nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/5/2010 1:43:00 PM

Gosh, I am surprised this one is not coming from Linda over there in Hawaii right now! Do ou live in Hawaii? That would be so cool. Congratulations! LUv,Andrea

Elaine George

Date: 7/5/2010 9:36:00 AM

I would love to see them. Lovely Haiku, dear Constance. Congratulaions on your in in Deborah's contest. Love, Lainie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/4/2010 6:43:00 PM

Congrats Marie on your HM for your Haiku in the Fireworks contest ..with a bit of Hawaii I see .. for four nights now I see them.. enjoy your honor as u celebrate in style.. on the 4th of July.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA...

Date: 7/4/2010 4:33:00 PM

Just wanted to drop by and add congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest to my other comment. Enjoy your success. I wish you many more. Karen

James Fraser

Date: 7/3/2010 10:55:00 AM

Wow Marie, this is a scene I would love to see, wonderful Haiku >> James

Date: 7/3/2010 10:30:00 AM

Good use of imagery. Interesting analogy between the first and last lines. Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/3/2010 6:28:00 AM

okies Marie just put the 3 dots BEFORE the word volcano in the title line all else is as request and now we just judge content and not form! BIG HUGS!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/3/2010 6:01:00 AM

I really love the unusual take on the subject! pretty please with sugar NO punctuation NO capitalization NO title. in the title line you put ...volcano explodes Light & Love

Raul Moreno

Date: 7/3/2010 2:24:00 AM

Great use of imagery, nice work...Raul