William Kelii Kekaula Poet Sedoka

Notes About The Poem

Listen to poem:

Hawaiian Winter - Ws

*Image of Beach Snowman by Pixabay.

Hawaiian Winter - WS

Snow trace e'er so oft
Soloist compacts barely
Do salt waves surge teasingly?

Surf and sand hulas
Sun melts away mini-me
So snowman bid Aloha?

Revised: 2023 January 10
Original: 2023 January 08
*1st Place*
Winter Sedoka
~~Charles Messina: Judged 2023 January 25

*HMS.

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Sara Kendrick January 26, 2023 at 6:15 AM I wanted to drop by to say congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara William Kelii Kekaula January 26, 2023 at 6:50 AM Thanks, Sara, for your visit and expressed thought and praise, Aloha William

Mahtab Bangalee January 25, 2023 at 7:27 PM superb and congrats for 1st place William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 10:44 PM Thank you, Mahtab, for your support, Aloha William

Andrea Dietrich January 25, 2023 at 1:14 PM This is really cute!! Congrats on number one win. William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 5:31 PM Eh! My understanding of Sedoka's is that the first two lines are the answers to the last third line being the question--emphasis of that being between two lovers--thanks Andrea, Aloha William

Paula Goldsmith January 25, 2023 at 8:41 AM Congratulations on your win. What a fun write/picture. You made me smile. Have a wonderful day.............. William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 9:17 AM I am pleased, Paula, in your delight and thoughtful kindness, have a blessed day, Aloha William

Linda Alice Fowler January 25, 2023 at 7:04 AM I'd love your winter William! Congratulations on your win! :) William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 7:54 AM Thanks, Linda, I think it's done with mirrors as our snow hugs our mountains in fear of sand, surf, and sun, Aloha William

Anisha Dutta January 25, 2023 at 6:26 AM Second stanza is unique. Big Congrats to win on your well deserved poem. Blessings William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 6:32 AM Thank you, Anisha, I am grateful for your acknowledgements and praise, Aloha William

Charles Messina January 25, 2023 at 5:55 AM Very nicely done, William. I loved how the "Sun melts away mini-me" (lol) Congratulations on your 1st place win in my contest! Aloha Charlie William Kelii Kekaula January 25, 2023 at 6:04 AM Thanks for the placement, Charlie, and I'm pleasantly pleased with your noted highlights and admiration, Aloha William

Michelle Smith January 9, 2023 at 8:36 PM It can snow at the beach? :O William Kelii Kekaula January 9, 2023 at 8:57 PM I'm guessing photo-chop somewhat, most likely brought in shaved ice for better effects imagery, Michelle, any icing for social media sites methinks, Aloha William

Joanna Daniel January 9, 2023 at 12:13 AM Like the image of skiing waves, William:) William Kelii Kekaula January 9, 2023 at 12:38 AM Thanks for the like, Jo, mostly year-round but a bit cooler winter-early spring months my friend, Aloha William

Sotto Poet January 8, 2023 at 9:50 AM Nicely penned, William. You captured a wonderful scene of Hawaiian winter. Good luck with the contest William Kelii Kekaula January 8, 2023 at 9:57 AM Thanks, Lasaad, pardon my sedoka pun but I'm certain Philly entertain tourist like me historically, my friend. Aloha William