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(Entry for the Haunted House, Haunted Cemetery or Haunted Woods 16 Lines of Rhyme Poetry Contest, sponsored by Tania Kitchin, submitted October 16, 2024 - Second Place)

The hiker decided to travel solo, something he wasn't accustomed to. After several hours hiking he decided to turn back, but then quickly realized the sky was turning black. As he struggled through the darkness and the rough, he came across a little house, luckily enough. He knocked loudly on the door, an answer never came, but as he was dog-tired, he entered all the same. Once he was inside, he saw something rather strange: a large bed was in the center, quite clean and all arranged. As he tried to sleep, he noticed paintings round the room; portraits of strange people, staring in the gloom. Each had a smile that sent chills up his spine, but drowsiness overcame him as he continued to recline. Next morning, he woke up, then had a sudden shock: there were no paintings on the walls, and the door was strangely locked.

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Date: 10/27/2024 9:03:00 PM
get him out please. thrilling write.. congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers.
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Date: 10/27/2024 12:02:00 PM
Jim, congrats on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Jim Healey
Date: 10/27/2024 4:46:00 PM
Thank you, Janice.
Date: 10/27/2024 10:00:00 AM
Congratulations to you as well on your high placement in the contest!
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Jim Healey
Date: 10/27/2024 4:45:00 PM
Thank you, Karen.
Date: 10/27/2024 9:08:00 AM
Chilling tale well told. Congratulations on your 2nd place, Jim
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Jim Healey
Date: 10/27/2024 4:45:00 PM
Thank you, Suzette.
Date: 10/27/2024 8:15:00 AM
Jim, a great creepy and spooky poem, congratulations on your winning placement.
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Jim Healey
Date: 10/27/2024 8:21:00 AM
Thank you, Tania. Always a pleasure to enter your contests. Cheers from Canada. J.
Date: 10/17/2024 4:12:00 AM
Oh, goodness, Jim. It's a Goosebumps thriller. At least he woke up... now to find a way out. lol Sounds like Disney's Haunted Mansion. Best wishes for being on the winner's list.
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Jim Healey
Date: 10/17/2024 5:05:00 AM
Lin, thank you very much. I guess finding a way out will have to be the sequel!

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