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The task commissioned, the black sand tested, deemed worthy of hard use. A sword-smith's prayer lifts aloft to the Shinto shrine requesting his soul be captured in the mirrored grain of this, his finest blade. An earthen furnace raging, flames licking the entrance. To smelt, to cleanse, charcoal carbon to mix, breathing strength into raw tamahagane. Shingane, kawagane, one brick of each. feeding the mouth of a greedy forge. Regurgitating and melting, making pliable these. Leathered craftsman hands drive out flaws and sparks, hammering, bending, meticulously folding thirty-thousand times. Tired and spent, black eyes linger over the polished steel, to inspect and examine, acknowledging a masterpiece. Now, commission completed, his motive revealed. with an unthinkable descent; momentum for a sickening plunge, as his own life force runs red the reflective hada.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 10/19/2017 9:03:00 AM
Reminiscent of Madam Butterfly. The suspense is a mix with the macabre intertwined with the smiths knowledgeable detail. Respect.
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Date: 11/11/2010 11:42:00 AM
Can't stop loving this poem
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Date: 9/12/2010 7:44:00 AM
Oh wow-- this sure is another write of yours that's masterfully written-- I am not familiar with the Japanese words you used here but I could still picture this in my mind's eye so well-- you sure are talented, Thvia! :) --nikko :)
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Date: 9/11/2010 6:00:00 PM
A poet should not trace with words the margin of a subject, but should immersed self into it like a sea, and come up licking it, breathing it, as is exemplified in this write ... we are earth's last philosopher's and first scientist, seeing with a double eye the length, width, and depth of human purpose. Congratulations to the genius that rises to the challenge
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Date: 9/9/2010 9:34:00 AM
i good one on subject, much enjoyed your write..P.D.
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Date: 9/9/2010 7:36:00 AM
Thanks for not only being a great creative genius, but honoring me as friend. I read this poem slowly, and excellence is here again. Such an artistic forging of a myth, superbly writ.
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