Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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Happy Is a Feeling Without a Ceiling

I find delight in bright stars and moonlight, a cooing dove, and wooing for love

'Happy' is a feeling without a ceiling, can't be bought, is more than words impart

It's a smiling child, wild flowers, afternoon showers, and the powers of God above

Happiness is pure pleasure, a treasure we can't hide and starts inside our hearts



:)    August 11, 2017   (:
Rhyme Battle: Happiness
Sponsor: Juli-Michelle

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Gregory Richard Barden October 7, 2017 at 1:24 AM Indeed ... indeed. Well-said with wonderful internal rhyme, and I totally agree! Congrats on another win, my friend - blessings! :-) <3

Darren White October 6, 2017 at 1:59 PM As always, I admire your internal rhyme, without your poems losing any of their natural flow. Well deserved 2nd place :)

Shirley Rebstock October 5, 2017 at 7:37 AM Lovely, much deserved win. Lin Lane October 5, 2017 at 7:43 AM Thank you ever so kindly, Shirley.

Constance La France October 4, 2017 at 2:05 PM Lin, congratulations on your win with this beauty ! Lin Lane October 4, 2017 at 4:21 PM Thank you very much, Constance.

Juli- Michelle October 4, 2017 at 1:24 PM Lin, I'm sorry for the long wait in this contest, but congratulations on your second place win! You deserve it, a wonderful poem! Love, Juli-Michelle Lin Lane October 4, 2017 at 4:20 PM It's quite alright, Juli. Thanks for the placement.

Geoffrey Brewer August 21, 2017 at 9:57 PM A delightful poem! It makes very effective use of a simple structure with images enhanced by creative rhymes.i love it. Well done Lin Lin Lane August 22, 2017 at 3:14 PM Thank you very much, Geoffrey

Joanna Daniel August 13, 2017 at 6:47 AM Beautiful, Lin, stay happy always:) Lin Lane August 22, 2017 at 3:13 PM Thanks, jo.

Janice Canerdy August 12, 2017 at 5:10 PM Well-written, Lin--so much said in just four lines! Janice Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 8:32 PM Thanks very much, Janice.

Winged Warrior August 12, 2017 at 4:47 PM I see internal rhymes...cleverly crafted my lady...best of luck Lin...^WW^ Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 8:32 PM Thank you for the kind comments, WW.

Ravi Sathasivam August 12, 2017 at 5:44 AM Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it. Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 8:31 PM Thanks, Ravi.

Susan Ashley August 11, 2017 at 11:47 PM Hi Lin, your title perfectly sets off this sparkling gem beautifully. I love it! Good luck in the contest! Lin Lane October 5, 2017 at 7:40 AM I truly value your in-depth comments, Susan. Thank you very much. Susan Ashley August 12, 2017 at 8:55 AM Actually, to be more specific, not only is your title superb in the spirit of the poem, but your poem, including your title, also has greater lyrical depth due to your wonderful internal rhymings and the super smooth flow of well-chosen and well-placed words. These qualities make your poem a sentimental sparkling gem that I enjoy reading over and over again! :) :) Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:29 AM Thanks ever so much, Susan. I'm glad you pointed out something you specifically liked.

Charlie Smith August 11, 2017 at 9:25 PM Love the title, best wishes Lin... Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:28 AM Hello and thank you, dear Charlie.

M. L. Kiser August 11, 2017 at 9:20 PM Beautifully done. Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:27 AM Thanks a bunch, M.L.

Vijay Pandit August 11, 2017 at 8:47 PM Well articulated theme on happiness, Lin. Good luck for the contest! Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:27 AM Thank you. I'm grateful for your well wishes.

Kim Rodrigues August 11, 2017 at 8:07 PM Lovely, Lin! Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:27 AM Thanks so much, Kim.

Connie Marcum Wong August 11, 2017 at 6:36 PM Being in nature, the open skies, day or night add to give a person freedom. Your third stanza does it for me Lin. Your great use of internal rhyme make your words roll off the tongue so smoothly. An excellent entry! : ) Lin Lane August 12, 2017 at 2:26 AM Thanks ever so much for your considerate and detailed comments, dear Connie. I love your visits. ;-)

Jan Allison August 11, 2017 at 6:11 PM Absolutely perfect for the contest Lin and I am smiling reading your lovely lines and relate to poem so much:-) hugs jan xx into faves for when I need to read something uplifting and that title is so so clever! Lin Lane August 11, 2017 at 6:13 PM Thank you for such sweet remarks, Jan, and I owe you a few smiles. I didn't mention chocolate, but I figure that's a given. lol