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Hanging By a Thread

I’m on the verge of losing everything
as lashing tears are thrashing ‘gainst the night
and mournful notes of black rose petals sing 
from wells so deep they’ve never seen the light.

My come to Jesus moment on my knees,
I’m at your mercy in my darkest hour.
In desperation hear my praise and pleas,
the moody gloom surrounding me is dour.

These thorny thoughts of you won’t let me loose
and breathing is a fight I might not win.
High hopes and dreams in broken promise noose
from rope of human nature and of sin.

In woeful rhythm beaten heart does beat ~
my blood does sing the blues of your deceit.

Copyright © Susan Ashley | Year Posted 2018

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Mark Massey Date: 7/17/2024 5:54:00 PM I felt like surfing through your site and came across this one. Many of your recent pieces seem softer, but this is a dart…it’s nice to see. The biblical references parallel the tribulations of being human. Good stuff. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 7/20/2024 10:31:00 AM Dear Mark, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. It's amazing to look back and see how one's writing style/mood has evolved over time. I appreciate you noticing the nuances of this evolution in my writing. Your uplifting thoughts always inspire me to reach further. Thank you again, my dear poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Joseph May Date: 5/13/2018 12:16:00 PM The first stanza sets the theme of hope in the dark hours of despair...Well wriitten Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/15/2018 10:14:00 AM Joseph, I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for the wonderful kindness of your comments and the delight of your visit.. Warmest wishes always, my friend. ~Susan

Alesia Leach Date: 5/8/2018 12:05:00 PM So sorrowful, a beautiful sonnet. My favorite, "mournful notes of black rose petals sing" touches my withered heart. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:20:00 PM Oh Alesia, the essence of your endearing comments touch my heart. I wish your withered heart to be in bloom again, my friend. Thank you for your beautiful kindness and I've missed your presence here. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

John Hamilton Date: 5/7/2018 7:42:00 PM A classic write that will stand the test of time, loved this sad sonnet of tragic love and betrayal, very well done! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:22:00 PM John, your visits are always a joy and your wonderful and genuine comments are always deeply appreciated. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my sonnet.. I hope all is well with you and yours, my friend.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Gary Smith Date: 5/7/2018 6:16:00 PM Such a classy write Susan, loved it :) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:12:00 PM Thank you, Gary, for your beautiful comment and your kind visit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley Date: 5/7/2018 7:22:00 AM Wonderful sonnet, executed in brilliant style. Perfect flow, great depth, clear message and solid gold closing lines! This is a truly superb and masterful sonnet my friend.. A fav.. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:30:00 PM My wonderful friend, Robert, thank you for your generous appreciation of my sonnet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poetic offering. I relish your wonderfully kind thoughts that you share, along with the encouragement and support you so freely give. You are a genuine poetry friend that I treasure. Many thanks for the fav as well, kind sir.. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf Date: 5/6/2018 10:54:00 PM High-camp blues, plaintively penned... Don't go dashing yourself against any altars now, you hear!! ~ Gershon Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:37:00 PM Gershon, I truly appreciate how you light up my poetry page with your wonderful presence and how your comments make me smile. Thank you for both the charm and wit you bestow with your kind sentiments.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Paul Callus Date: 5/6/2018 2:02:00 PM As a capable writer you totally immerse yourself in the troubled waters of the subject of this poem, Susan. Deceit and broken dreams instill pain and feelings of helplessness. For many, hanging on to fragile sanity could be too much to achieve...that thread could easily snap! ~ A round of applause for the perfect form, too! ~ warm regards // paul Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 9:10:00 PM Yes, Paul, you have astutely assessed my poem to a tee :)) Under trying circumstances, hanging on to fragile sanity can be like hanging by a tenuous thread - a very unstable situation for sure.. Thank you for your perceptive comments and for lighting up my page with your wonderful presence, my dear friend. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Maria Williams Date: 5/6/2018 8:11:00 AM "and mournful notes of black rose petals sing from wells so deep they’ve never seen the light', I absolutely love those two lines, as I do your whole poem Susan. Beautiful and intense. I read somewhere that "the mirror of a man's heart is his actions" When I read your poem it reminded me of that quote. A definite fave for me....Maria xxx Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 8:57:00 PM p.s. I hope you rec'd my emails in response to yours.. :) xoxox Susan Ashley Date: 5/8/2018 8:56:00 PM Thank you, my dearest friend, Maria.. I apologize for the delay in responding to your beautiful comments of appreciation - the busy-ness of my life has taken me away from PS more than I'd like lately.. I love the quote you so eloquently used in your comments, I agree with you and I would add that 'actions speak louder than words', as well.. I relish your lovely thoughts and your inspiring friendship always. Many thanks as well for the fav, lovely lady.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan xox

John Gondolf Date: 5/6/2018 8:05:00 AM A well written and moving sonnet, Susan, I could feel the emotion in this. I really enjoy reading your sonnets, my friend, they never disappoint. Best wishes. John Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/6/2018 9:20:00 AM Hi John, thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me and spending time with my poetry. I'm so glad you could feel the emotion, I was hoping this poem would be impactful.. Your visit and your kindness is such a delight, my wonderful friend! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Arturo Michael Date: 5/6/2018 5:43:00 AM By the thread you are...I hope it's your imagination...for it sounds real...Happy to see you...for the vibe has changed so much...I'm beginning to miss poets like you...standing with you where ever you may be...All the best Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/6/2018 9:16:00 AM Hello my dear friend, Arturo! Yes, it is from my imagination that is fueled by the trials and tribulations of life (sometimes but not always necessarily my own.. lol!), spiced up with drama and melancholy. I'm just enjoying writing turbulent, sad stuff lately.. I'm so glad this poem moved you, mon ami :)) Thank you for standing with me and for your thoughtful and beautiful comments. They always mean the world to me.. Warmest wishes as I stand with you as well. ~Susan

Charles Messina Date: 5/5/2018 9:11:00 PM Your poems flow beautifully, Susan...You have mastered yet another one...Very well done...Warm wishes...Charlie Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/5/2018 9:39:00 PM Charlie, your beautiful comments reflect the warmth that I feel resides in your heart and soul. Thank you for your kindness and for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/5/2018 8:07:00 PM wow, emotive and very beautifully written, dear. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/5/2018 9:34:00 PM Andrea, you uplift and inspire me with your beautiful comments. Thank you for your kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands Date: 5/5/2018 2:22:00 PM Wow Susan. This is a very powerful poem. I can feel it. Well written and expressed :) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/5/2018 3:04:00 PM Heidi, it's so great to see you! I relish your powerful comments and fully appreciate your visit and your time spent with my poem. Thank you and warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan

Robertina B. Date: 5/5/2018 12:35:00 PM Such beautiful and inspiring creativity, Susan... Very moving poem, as it moved me.. Brava!! All the best to you!! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/5/2018 3:00:00 PM Robertina, I'm elated that the emotions expressed in my poem moved you.. and many thank you's for sharing your wonderful thought with me, your lovely comments are deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Lunita Blanca Date: 5/5/2018 11:13:00 AM Susan, there is no greater folly than to try to be reasonable about love. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 5/5/2018 11:24:00 AM Indeed! Such sage words I do agree with, Carlos. I relish your beautifully insightful thoughts and your visit is a delight! Warmest wishes. ~Susan