Handicapped

you know I’ll break with a straw on my back ~ remove the hump then we’ll see By David Kavanagh

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/2/2022 12:02:00 PM

Montypythonesque Sir David This is a Dead Camel The last straw got the hump Fantastic

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2022 2:24:00 PM

Just how many burdens are we expected to carry Christopher when we cannot even see past the ones we already have, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/24/2022 7:24:00 PM

Oh wow that is quote amazing, that little nugget is. A fave

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/25/2022 12:40:00 AM

Heya Andrea, life is rarely burden-free, seems those with the heaviest cross to bear, are the ones who are always expected to bear more, and if it doesn’t kill them, it certainly prevents them from reaching their true potential, thank you so much for the Fave, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/19/2022 12:50:00 PM

Sometimes the burden is too much…let someone else carry the straw. God bless you, David!

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/19/2022 2:15:00 PM

Thank you Kim, the burden always seems more burdensome when we are already carry a burden, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/16/2022 1:16:00 PM

Amazes me how some with the burden overcome lifes obstacles and live a near normal life. Hope you're well David, you're wearing the rangers star again in my latest epic lol. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/16/2022 1:44:00 PM

Ha I can’t wait to read it Tom, I’ve been just popping in and out on the soup recently, perhaps a little under the weather but nothing worth complaining about, indeed we can only but imagine how different they would be without any burden or disability, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 8/15/2022 5:57:00 PM

hmmm, I'll have to think about this one for a while. That's one of the best things about your poetry, David... it's never in black in white. Interestingly quizzical.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/16/2022 12:44:00 AM

Heya Jenna this one is for those who are overcome with burden, or may be handicapped in some way, the metaphoric hump prevents them from reaching a normal fair potential, but if the burden was taken away, even the spine breaking straw would not be a limit, I may have hit on a few serendipitous ramifications in here too, cheers David

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 8/15/2022 5:28:00 PM

Your wit has me chuckling. Thoroughly enjoyed! I hope you and yours are well David, write on! xomo

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/16/2022 12:49:00 AM

Great to see you Super Mo, yeah we’re all fine hope you are too, I think there is a lot of satirical truth embedded in this one, is the playing field ever really level, certainly not for those with metaphoric humps to be carried around, on top of everything else, cheers David