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Haiku Two

His neck cocks forward lonely voice reverberates The first Loonie Tune SKAT's any Haiku will do contest.

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Casarah Nance

Date: 10/30/2014 6:45:00 AM

Cute and clever :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/30/2014 9:01:00 AM

Thanks Casarah.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/25/2013 12:40:00 AM

After reading this I thought of a baby watching his first Looney Tune cartoon... but then I read you and Andrea's conversation and was surprised by how far off I was... the "cocking of head" made me think of babies... haiku can be quite mind-teasers sometime!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/25/2013 7:27:00 AM

It was a play on words. I did enjoy watching loonie toons as a child.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/3/2013 12:13:00 PM

Hmm, this could be either about a real loonie cartoon or a clever piece on a loon of the night. In any event, I love the cute visual.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/3/2013 2:45:00 PM

I was describing an actual Loon but I do find the last two reactions amusing.

Daver Austin

Date: 1/3/2013 10:14:00 AM

Didn't see it, but can imagine. You might be talking of a D.C. politician though. They are all Lonnie Tunes and Merry Melodies. Love, daver

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/3/2013 10:31:00 AM

Hey Daver you have a good point there lol

Rollo West

Date: 1/2/2013 8:14:00 PM

Hi Richard, gotta love this one, great Haiku my friend. Rollo

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/2/2013 9:01:00 PM

Thanks Rollo, still not sure if I got this form right.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/2/2013 6:16:00 PM

I would say the subject of this is the loon? the fragmented line is the hardest to compose [like the last line..the punch line of a limerick] with this fragment you are to use an extra bit of sensory info to draw the reader into the moment, the scene...what you have here is a subjective write, where in haiku we seek to be object. There is more info here on you than on the image of the loon, listing this as senryu IF its about you and not the loon would be safer?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/2/2013 6:27:00 PM

have a look again and see what you think.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/2/2013 6:19:00 PM

[the loon/cries out in the night -- a soft smile] the marks indicate the next phrase is the ahHA the surprise shift of image and extra input about becuase you don't use them the reader is not sure if you or the loon is the subject [my breath rises/ and falls in the moonlight-- a loon calls]

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/2/2013 5:54:00 PM

Interesting Haiku..I think that it would be interesting to actually hear a Loon in real life..I heard them on a movie once..They have a very interesting call..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/2/2013 6:29:00 PM

they are quite beautiful. Very prevelent in Canada. We have the Loon on our Dollar Coin, It is refered to as a Loonie.