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Haiku - For Contest

nostalgia mosaics fractured vision leaded doubts 5/27/2016 ((first post -- 1/25/2014)) submitted to – Glass Art – Haiku – Poetry contest sponsor – SKAT A

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Jan Allison

Date: 6/6/2016 5:50:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats John:-) hugs Jan xx

Seosamh De Burca

Date: 6/5/2016 8:09:00 PM

Congrats on your win. Well done.

Edward Ebbs

Date: 6/5/2016 4:39:00 PM

Good job john, congrats!

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/5/2016 1:27:00 PM

A great Haiku, John. Congratulations on your placement! Sandra

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/5/2016 10:46:00 AM

Congrats on your win with this beautiful haiku my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

John Lawless
Date: 6/5/2016 12:00:00 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting BL

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/5/2016 10:18:00 AM

this was and STILL is fantastic, John. Congrats in the top ten!

John Lawless
Date: 6/5/2016 12:00:00 PM

Thanks again Andrea, I am still at odds with the Haiku world.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/5/2016 8:41:00 AM

Congrats on your win.;0)

John Lawless
Date: 6/5/2016 12:00:00 PM

thanks Richard

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/5/2016 8:27:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, John:)

Karam Misra

Date: 6/4/2016 11:30:00 PM

John, this is superb. Congratulations on your win. Feel should have been placed higher. All three lines beautifully knit. Leaded counts.Distorted nostalgia....... ~karam~

John Lawless
Date: 6/5/2016 11:59:00 AM

thanks Miram for reading and commenting, it is appreciated.

Skat A

Date: 6/4/2016 11:06:00 PM

John L, CONGRATULATION! On your awesome win. Stop by my latest blog "Objects Of Beauty" and celebrate your win if you'd like. This was a very enjoyable contest, a tough one to judge at the very end. Love **SKAT**

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2016 10:05:00 AM

A great modern form haiku. I asked which to use, traditional or modern and she didn't reply yet, so I am guessing this will do very nicely.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/28/2016 10:30:00 AM

what I meant to say just now is that YOURS does not do that WRONG way. I think you did the right way!!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/28/2016 10:29:00 AM

I did a blog recently on tanka. the modern ones as touted by the Tanka Society of america. They are very much like haiku and if you go read them, you can see the way haiku and tanka should be done, with that AHA line at the end! it's hard to get poets to see that. i have a difficult time getting juxtaposition too. Often I am just putting an ending that is a recap of what i just said. Many are doing that, and sadly, it's not the right way. Yours here does not do that.

John Lawless
Date: 5/28/2016 10:14:00 AM

We shall see Andrea. I am at odds with the many variations on what constitutes a Haiku/Senryu. I'll have to check back with you on exactly what she wants

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 5/28/2016 8:23:00 AM

nicely penned.

John Lawless
Date: 5/28/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thanks Lenny

Jan Allison

Date: 5/28/2016 7:37:00 AM

very clever haiku John good luck in the contest - Skat set us quite a challenge here:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 5/28/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thanks Jan, these thoughts just came as I looked at the stained glass works in the pictures.