Haiku 4

shallow puddles
dot the battered sidewalk--
water ripples
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Hunter Avatar
April 23, 2013 at 9:03 AM
Like one I had a week or so...frankenstein came over to my house to play with my kids...and I let him. But he was playing too rough(imagine that) and I had to put him out. He threw a fit in my yard after I scolded him, and choked my neighbor to death. Heck, I don't even have neighbors...haha.
Hunter Avatar
April 23, 2013 at 8:59 AM
I'll bet Taiwan is awesome to see. And get ready for another wild ride if jasmine tea affects you like it does me. I'm not sure if I want to drink anymore. The dreams aren't always pleasant for me.
Zerbst Avatar
March 12, 2013 at 12:26 PM
This is really good for number four! You have created an image that feeds the imagination, so that each person fills in the rest of the picture in their own way.
Williams Avatar
March 7, 2013 at 3:12 AM
Heather good image....David
Horsman Avatar
March 6, 2013 at 4:40 PM
amazing, Heather this is, one can indeed create a mind full of imagery here.
Dietrich Avatar
March 6, 2013 at 2:41 PM
Fantastic imagery!! Keep those haiku coming, sweetie. I am happy just to find time to get to the poets who have commented to me. I need to double the hours in every day!!
Squyres Avatar
March 6, 2013 at 2:05 PM
Love this image !!!
A   Avatar
March 5, 2013 at 8:49 PM
awe Heather, I love rain, I love the haiku. I'm picturing my feet dipping in the shallow puddles. this is some good splashing fun, if you like this imagery... enjoyed~ LINDA
Lamoureux Avatar
March 5, 2013 at 5:25 AM
Good morning Heather, you inspired me to write a poem this morning. Have a wonderful day.
Ryerson Avatar
March 5, 2013 at 4:27 AM
Good morning beautiful friend...'dot the battered sidewalk'...Nice way to start the day and why do I feel like writing a haiku all of a sudden?....Hummm, let's see here, there's gotta...
Jordan Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 9:05 PM
Very nice writing. It's quite visual. J
Lamoureux Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 8:29 PM
You make this style seem simple, this is one form I can't seem to get the hang of. Maybe if I keep reading yours the style might sink in.
Gorelick Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 8:20 PM
Good one Heather..perfect description. BG
Jones Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 5:04 PM
Sounds like a lovely walk in a summer shower...
O'Leary Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 3:25 PM
Nice! Terry
Kendrick Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 1:26 PM
We have had our share of rain this spring also but come summer we will be wanting some..Sara
Hunter Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 12:41 PM
It's easy to see this haiku...Great work, Heather!...love how you used battered to describe the sidewalk...
Manassian Avatar
March 4, 2013 at 11:30 AM
Enchanting! :) Let the ripples of joy spread, my dear!
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