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Haiku 3 - 2020

sketching birds in flight am drawing flowers instead birds are a mistake

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Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 12/2/2020 12:47:00 AM

This is an excellent haiku poem, my sister of God's grace, Carol. I love the flow of the words and the impact of the message. The descriptive excellence is lovely. Great analogy. The theme great, and tenor move the piece along with much grace. Great job! https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/53812816-sincerely-speaking-spiritually.

Carol Fillmore
Date: 12/2/2020 4:30:00 AM

Thanks so much, Joseph, your words are very kind and encouraging! I appreciate your comments so much:)

Carol Fillmore

Date: 1/4/2020 3:51:00 AM

thank you yet again Ritsuko!! Knowing you imagined this scene is so helpful, now I know my writing is correct:) you felt what I wrote. The haiku was in response to a sketching challenge yesterday. I kept thinking the prompt was birds flying. Something made me check the list and discovered the prompt/subject was flowers! Ooops I did draw flowers not birds flying though I should have added the birds flying in the sky lol

Rituko Shindo
Date: 1/4/2020 4:29:00 AM

I think the composition of pictures you take is very good. You have good taste in pictures. So I think that sense is reflected in the haiku.

Rituko Shindo

Date: 1/4/2020 2:31:00 AM

First I saw the vast sky, then my eyes focus the flowers on the ground, and then my eyes moved to the parson who was sketching. Watching a haiku program on TV, the instructor of the program says, "Make the reader can imagine the picture" and "Make the picture that has depth, height so on." I felt them in your haiku.