Haiku 28

do you hear it?
that be the sound of the "rule for haiku"
snapping



NOTE: 5-7-5 meet 4-10-2...

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Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

May 8, 2020 at 4:31 PM

Thought I'd check out a haiku of yours; as fate would have it...

Timothy Hicks

May 9, 2020 at 3:45 PM

It's a bit of rebel-ku ... lol.

Paul Callus

April 30, 2020 at 2:55 PM

I like the originality of this haiku (senryu) Timothy. Moving away from the 5-7-5 syllable count makes a lot of sense. Many people do not realize that English and Japanese sound syllables are different from each other. ~ Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

April 30, 2020 at 9:40 PM

Exactly! One of the reasons I don't put too much weight into syllables where haiku is concerned.

Liam Mcdaid

October 24, 2014 at 9:24 AM

i really like this piece got me smiling

Timothy Hicks

October 24, 2014 at 10:55 AM

Not so much a "haiku" in content... but I wanted to express how NOT vital syllable counting is in haiku.

Robert Pettit

May 15, 2013 at 10:31 PM

Nice thinking outside the box. Good expressiveness.

Timothy Hicks

May 15, 2013 at 10:38 PM

Thanks Robert :)

Karen Anglesey

May 15, 2013 at 7:47 PM

Snap Crackle Pop... I am a NON-conformist and love this poem ! Great creativity!

Timothy Hicks

May 15, 2013 at 10:20 PM

I used to write my haiku strictly by those rules and it took me quite awhile to break free my shell. But once I did I felt a lot more free to express myself... pleased you like my poem!

Donna Jones

May 15, 2013 at 6:24 PM

Hey Timothy...I don't know enough about them to know it wasn't true! I read the below comments and laughed at myself!!!!!! I also have FINALLY figured out I guess you are not supposed to title haiku..like I have been doing....duh! Me......oh well...old dogs can learn.......I'll start now with 1.

Timothy Hicks

May 15, 2013 at 6:30 PM

I'm happy you're trying to keep the spirit of haiku alive! Some haiku poets will conform to the 5-7-5 rule at all costs (but I don't think syllable counting is the point of haiku)... it's about observations and creating a picture in as few words as possible.