Haiku 2-17-2018

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This thought came to me as I read the theme for Silent One's Sunrise/Sunset contest. Those beautiful pictures .... gone....

HAIKU 2/17/2018 SUNRISE NEVER CAME IN THE SILENT DARKNESS SUNSET WEPT John G. Lawless ©2/17/2018

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Susan Ashley

Date: 2/20/2018 8:19:00 PM

Oh how beautifully deep, emotional and thoughtful John. Such striking and melancholy imagery. A superb Haiku! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

John Lawless
Date: 2/21/2018 9:16:00 PM

thanks Susan, for reading and commenting.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/20/2018 3:34:00 PM

I love these kinds of Haiku that go beyond what they say haiku are supposed to do. I do know some modern Haiku writers who use metaphor, etc. Love this.

John Lawless
Date: 2/21/2018 9:08:00 PM

Andrea, if poetry did not go beyond "what they say" it is supposed to be....well, then I guess it would cease to be poetry. Thanks for stopping to read and comment.

Silent One

Date: 2/17/2018 9:18:00 AM

Excellent haiku John, this is really deep... I guess the sun just moves on to light in another place to keep happy...

John Lawless
Date: 2/21/2018 9:12:00 PM

Thanks Silent One, I like the Haiku as it demands a more succinct approach to content and translates into a more precise approach when I use other forms. Appreciate your comments.