Notes About The Poem

I read a poem by Mary Jo Hoose, titled:  “Broken Bruised And Busted” (which is located on this site) – if you have not read her poem, you need to –now.   Her poem, written with a brutal honesty, touched my heart and brought an awareness of the violence that many women endure in relationships.   Sadly, this violence will hold many in bondage.  But some will overcome the violence -- to survive, to draw strength from the wounds (physical, mental, and emotionally) to forgive and to live courageously and boldly.  So I wanted to honor this “country girl” with a haiku, nature and human nature can strike deadly damage.

 

I know most of you can put words and images together much better than I can – so I would encourage anyone whose heart is stirred by Mary’s poem to add their thoughts and poems so that together we may bring more awareness of this violence against women and to provide hope and encouragement to the battered women -- live freely.

 

As I read "Broken Bruised And Busted,"  I remembered this:   a storm was coming in off the Mediterranean Sea – lightning was coming straight down into the water, a moment later a loud crack of the thunder.  Then the rain, the wind . . . the violence of the storm . . .  devastation . . .  the power went out.   Quick, terrible and violent . . .

Haiku 16: Blood Pain

lightning punching down,
                     fast, blinding, loud – blood pain
                                a prayer of tears 







to all who have suffered violence


David Meade
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Gauthier Avatar
March 24, 2018 at 11:43 AM
Powerful haiku, well done, David.
Duncan Avatar
October 13, 2015 at 4:49 PM
love the haiku. I've written a few myself. Now I shall read Mary Jo Hoose's “Broken Bruised And Busted” :)
Yan Avatar
June 14, 2015 at 10:02 PM
great Haiku! I have translated into Chinese
Nunez Avatar
April 5, 2015 at 10:17 AM
Powerful, perceptive write, David. Never has it been said in so few a word as this. Perfect 7. Waves and smiles fro the isles! :) Kim
Jones Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 3:12 PM
David, this is a great Haiku. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia
Boyle Avatar
November 27, 2014 at 8:15 PM
Wow, excellent. I really enjoy poems that are sparse, every word matters. Good flow, the simplicity is everything. Unfortunately I can relate to it on a personal level. Be well. Pb
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
November 14, 2014 at 10:17 PM
powerful heartfelt haiku.. !
Meade Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 3:21 PM
thank-you -- you are the best.
Walker  Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 6:22 PM
Congratulations on being featured as poem of the day David... Verlena
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:04 PM
Thank-you Ms. Walker . . .
Gravett Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 3:41 PM
Congratulations, very good poem...
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 4:54 PM
Thanks Mark, I really enjoyed your "I am" in your last poem. Live generously my friend.
Bateman Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 10:27 AM
Congratulations David on receiving Poem of the Day for your Haiku on "Blood Pain!!" I read this yesterday and marveled at it's innate quality and power. Well-Done!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 4:53 PM
Gary, you are a power to reckon with -- your power is in your words and encouragement. Keep your words flowing, you are making a difference.
Roper Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 7:51 AM
Congratulations David on your poem of the day :) eve
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:03 AM
You know this story better than me. Here's to all abused women -- may they find the freedom, hope and courage to live freely . . . and may we as a community continue to reach out creatively to love and to encourage . . . and in the words of Mary Jo -- a big country hug!
Yvonne Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 6:37 AM
A sad but poignant write. Congratulations on your piece being chosen as the poem of the day.
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:06 AM
Thank-you Maurice, the pain and violence these women endure is sad but the prayer of tears brings hope. All the very best.
Smith Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 5:30 AM
A great piece to be showcased
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:17 AM
Thanks Tim, it will take strong and courageous hearts like yours to make a difference. Here's to making a positive impact on this violent issue. All the best my friend.
Allison Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 2:11 AM
WOOHOOOO someone was listening to me - poem of the day - fantastic - many congrats! Hugs Jan xxxxx
Allison Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:54 AM
Oh David that is such a sweet thing to say about me - I love reading your work - I think its mere co-incidence I made that comment and it happened for you but oh BOY I am so so happy this powerful write got poem of the day so its is more widely seen by the poetry soup audience:-) :-) :-) xxx Hugs Jan xxx
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:15 AM
Thank-you Jan for your continued support and love, you have never missed a poem I have posted. You are one of the "powerful" women who make a difference. May your days be filled with joy and light so as you touch others they will be blessed as I am by you!
Smith Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 5:28 AM
We all listen to you :)
Mcdaid Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 1:18 AM
excellent pen congratulations beautifully crafted
Meade Avatar
November 3, 2014 at 8:21 AM
Thank Liam, the inspiration comes from the beauty of the women like Mary Jo -- who turned violence, pain, ugliness into forgiveness, strength, and the will to live courageously and freely. All the best.
Bateman Avatar
November 2, 2014 at 5:55 PM
David, Extraordinarily well-conceived and articulated!! Quite Powerful!! I know Mary Jo and I commented as well on her poem. I wanted you to know to that it is indeed very nice of you to acknowledge Mary Jo with this write. I think a number us as colleagues and friends with her have made some very strong supportive comments on her behalf. A most compelling write David. All the best, Gary
Meade Avatar
November 2, 2014 at 7:56 PM
yes, very much of an extended family -- I can sense the care and the love. Very comforting. Thank-you for your kind words.
Dietrich Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 10:41 PM
Very intense!! The footnote made it crystal clear for me. I think if you did this in tanka form, giving an example of the abuse first, that would make an excellent form for this idea.
Meade Avatar
November 2, 2014 at 8:11 AM
Funny, I thought of doing a tanka with it's extra lines but I have never done one before and Mary Jo's words had been haunting me all week -- I needed to get it out. Wish you were closer so that we could play with words and styles . . . I really appreciate your wisdom and your poems . . . may we always continue to learn and care for others. All the best.
Roper Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 8:56 PM
Powerful words David, yes I did read Mary Jo's write very emotional, a very brave lady that was blessed with a lot of strength
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 10:13 PM
Your strength goes before you . . . and we are stronger together. All the best.
Thajudeen Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 8:19 PM
Interesting to read.A creative poem.Regards,-Safa
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 10:16 PM
Thank-you, you are always so loyal in reading my poems. Mighty grateful to you.
Goff Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 7:29 PM
Nice one, David, Pop taught me Men never strike a Woman....plain & simple...jimbo
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 10:15 PM
Yep, learned the same lesson!! Need to give some education to some boys!!
Chircop Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 5:19 PM
Profound and deep words indeed!Charma
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 6:04 PM
deep is the pain but deeper is the hope we can provide. thank-you for your words. All the best.
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 4:57 PM
would love to see this powerful write as poem of the day - an EXCELLENT hakiu - such great imagery - great pen my friend! Hugs Jan xxx
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 5:49 PM
Thank-you Jan, as a father of three daughters I believe it important to stand firm against all forms of abuse. I love this community and all the creative people -- it would be awesome to see people contact their local area women's shelter -- volunteer, donate money, clothes, furniture . . . write poems of encouragement to women who have suffer -- provide hope. All the best my friend.
Smith Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 4:47 PM
David this is so powerful we need more light shed on this subject...well done Tim
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 6:03 PM
Yes -- much light and a lot of action . . . I believe we are being called to help others have hope. All the best.
Cruz Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 3:01 PM
Great depiction David well written piece. Thanks for sharing
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 6:05 PM
thank-you my friend -- let's make a difference. All the best.
Petersen Potter Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 1:43 PM
Well written Dave! Very powerful lines, and imagery. Thanks for visiting my page again! ;) Xxxx D.
Meade Avatar
November 1, 2014 at 10:14 PM
Powerful lines for powerful women -- all the best friend.
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