Haiku

on a bitter wind brown leaves swirl then settle down rain spatters the earth

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Jan Allison

Date: 12/17/2020 4:12:00 PM

such vivid description i feel quite chilled especially as it is a reflection of our current weather - brrr:-) hugs jan xx

Belden Raiser
Date: 12/17/2020 6:49:00 PM

That's our winter in the south. Thanks Jan.

Carol Louise Moon

Date: 12/17/2020 2:47:00 PM

With so many one-syllable words this haiku moves along quickly, just like the theme within it. Congrats on a well-crafted haiku Belden.

Belden Raiser
Date: 12/17/2020 6:47:00 PM

Thank you Carol, I had forgotten this was from a series of maximum word count haikus I did. I really appreciate your comment.

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/17/2020 10:17:00 AM

Oh, I love your atmospheric imagery, beautifully done, Beldon. A sensory feast evoking a strong visual. Congratulations on your wonderful win in Brian's contest.. ~Susan

Belden Raiser
Date: 12/17/2020 6:42:00 PM

Hi Susan, that is so kind of you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/16/2020 3:21:00 PM

I love the images you used . One of my favorites on the winner list!

Belden Raiser
Date: 12/16/2020 5:20:00 PM

Hi Andrea, I was a little surprised at how fast Brian judged it, and that I placed. Thank you for commenting.