Haiku 11-14-2016

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...a borderline Senryu laced with metaphor disguised as a Haiku

Haiku 11/14/2016 Come closer my love touch softly with stolen light a Winter’s darkness John G. Lawless 11/14/2016

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Chris Green

Date: 11/15/2016 7:25:00 AM

I really enjoyed this. The emotions expressed felt soft and comforting. A beautifully written piece.

John Lawless
Date: 11/15/2016 12:10:00 PM

Thanks Chris.

Probir Gupta

Date: 11/15/2016 5:56:00 AM

Touching and lovely ... very good haiku with the striking last line ...

John Lawless
Date: 11/15/2016 12:10:00 PM

Thanks Prober, appreciate your stopping by to comment

Darren White

Date: 11/15/2016 4:20:00 AM

Ohhh, that sends me back to bed.... longing...

John Lawless
Date: 11/15/2016 12:09:00 PM

Jeesh, Darren, I hope you weren't late for work.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/15/2016 3:53:00 AM

this is so so so so so beautiful John it gave me a tingle down my spine when I read it - a gem of a haiku/Senryu ... I wish they had a '3 line poetry' form which is suitable for poems that don't quite fit in the box. Into faves I LOVE it:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 11/15/2016 7:01:00 PM

Troika sounds a fantastic idea John - i had a 3 line poem published in a journal by prolific press I must try and find it:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 11/15/2016 12:09:00 PM

Glad you got a shiver Jan. Perhaps a very creative Poetrysoup poet might "invent" such a form..let me see...hmmm a poetic "Troika"..three lines...galloping....

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/14/2016 9:13:00 PM

ooh lalala. Love it.

John Lawless
Date: 11/15/2016 12:05:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I think I have been touched by the "super moon syndrome"