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Haiku 001

eyes wide open flowers sway in the the breeze allergies abound Received: Honorable Mention Brain Strand's "Eight Or Less"contest 04/2012

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Melanie Tan

Date: 6/19/2012 7:53:00 PM

Nice~~xoxo-Melly

Simon Henderson

Date: 6/5/2012 3:50:00 PM

This is great........You get a story in the shortest space possible....fabulous....

Dalila Agtani

Date: 5/11/2012 11:49:00 PM

Interesting numbers in your Haikus Carol. I love them. Short and enjoyable to read. Thank you too for visiting me and commenting on my humble poems. Love Dalila

Terry O'Leary

Date: 4/21/2012 2:24:00 PM

I get that itchy feeling... But it itches sooo good... Terry

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/13/2012 10:01:00 AM

Feelings of reality, enjoyed and congrats for win. Loved always, though i am late, bl

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/2/2012 11:56:00 AM

i stil have the allergies, carol, ohh, ohhh.. a glistening 'ku... sweet cheers to you for the special win!..:) huggs!

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/2/2012 11:25:00 AM

Congrats on your HM, Carol! For a season that is so beautiful, it sure can cause some problems. I enjoyed your haiku. Love, Kim

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/2/2012 5:13:00 AM

Thank you to all who have commented and the congrats. Thank you for my HM placement Brian. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/1/2012 7:01:00 PM

Great win. Every time I go outside I have a sneezing spell. Congratulations on a great haiku and win. Love, Joyce

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/1/2012 6:27:00 PM

Congrad's on your win!

Deborah Burch

Date: 4/1/2012 3:29:00 PM

Isn't it the truth!!! My vehicle is no longer red--due to the mass of pollen...lol...Congratulations on your win Carol...love it...big huggsss,love deb

Gail Debole

Date: 3/31/2012 7:14:00 PM

Hi Carol - Good poem! Especially like the way you ended it. Thank you so much for your supporting comments about my poems. - Gail

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/30/2012 12:05:00 PM

Looking for new work from ya, Carol...I bet you are out working in your garden since Mother Nature gave us all a head start!....Hugs, GWendolen

George Aul

Date: 3/30/2012 9:26:00 AM

I am fortunate indeed to enjoy without sneezing, watery eyes, etc. ........ Thank you for your kind comments - you have been a very kind and inspirational person on this site.................George

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/30/2012 6:35:00 AM

a shocking reality last line to this Haiku. Well done Carol

Melinde Guadalupe

Date: 3/30/2012 12:34:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by to see if i had written a new poem.....thanks also for your advices and comments.....i love flowers and i think i don't have an allergy on flowers....and my eyes open wide every time i see flowers....may you always have a great day and take care always...(<")Love, Melinde

Maureen Lefanue

Date: 3/29/2012 11:47:00 PM

Thanks, Carol, for your kind comment. Allergies aren't great. Have you tried Horseradish? I have treated this problem as a Naturopath - easy to treat with herbs whether it is acute or chronic. There's always a lymphatic and liver involvement. Have always had success. Hope you have a great weekend. Love, Maureen

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/29/2012 10:02:00 PM

hahaha, a funny one I think. It gets me every MAy or June, that dang allergy!!! Very nice, Carol.

M.I.A .

Date: 3/29/2012 9:18:00 PM

LoL, i'm inflicted with allergies too so I can totally relate to this. wonderful Haiku, carol. for all this time, i thank you

Chittaranjan Dey

Date: 3/29/2012 7:00:00 AM

Keep this allergies for ever (hahah). Nicely written. Enjoyed this.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 3/28/2012 4:59:00 PM

nice haiku,,, and yes I know the feeling of allergy eyes,, have a blessed day Carol ;}

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/28/2012 3:25:00 PM

Oh yes, already people are complaining of their allergies...almost as much as they complained about winter. Spring is beautiful but for people with allergies, this is a tough time. Excellent haiku, dear! Love, Carolyn

Jack Horne

Date: 3/28/2012 1:04:00 PM

yes, so true! Lovely haiku, Carol

Cindy Lu

Date: 3/28/2012 12:47:00 PM

excellent poetry. will miss ya dear poetess, left 1 standing..... :) when one door closes another opens ;)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 3/28/2012 12:09:00 PM

That last line caught me by surprise, Carol :) How I hope that allergies won't act up too much though-- and I read your comment in my diminished hexaverse-- At first, I was kind of stumped on how to go about it, but eventually I was able to come up with something, I am hoping you will, too :) hugs!