Haiku 001

eyes wide open
flowers sway in the the breeze
allergies abound
Received: Honorable Mention Brain Strand's "Eight Or Less"contest 04/2012
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Tan Avatar
June 19, 2012 at 7:53 PM
Nice~~xoxo-Melly
Henderson Avatar
June 5, 2012 at 3:50 PM
This is great........You get a story in the shortest space possible....fabulous....
Agtani Avatar
May 11, 2012 at 11:49 PM
Interesting numbers in your Haikus Carol. I love them. Short and enjoyable to read. Thank you too for visiting me and commenting on my humble poems. Love Dalila
O'Leary Avatar
April 21, 2012 at 2:24 PM
I get that itchy feeling... But it itches sooo good... Terry
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April 13, 2012 at 10:01 AM
Feelings of reality, enjoyed and congrats for win. Loved always, though i am late, bl
Onclaud Avatar
April 2, 2012 at 11:56 AM
i stil have the allergies, carol, ohh, ohhh.. a glistening 'ku... sweet cheers to you for the special win!..:) huggs!
Merryman Avatar
April 2, 2012 at 11:25 AM
Congrats on your HM, Carol! For a season that is so beautiful, it sure can cause some problems. I enjoyed your haiku. Love, Kim
Brown Avatar
April 2, 2012 at 5:13 AM
Thank you to all who have commented and the congrats. Thank you for my HM placement Brian. Love, Carol
Johnson Avatar
April 1, 2012 at 7:01 PM
Great win. Every time I go outside I have a sneezing spell. Congratulations on a great haiku and win. Love, Joyce
Guzzi Avatar
April 1, 2012 at 6:27 PM
Congrad's on your win!
Burch Avatar
April 1, 2012 at 3:29 PM
Isn't it the truth!!! My vehicle is no longer red--due to the mass of pollen...lol...Congratulations on your win Carol...love it...big huggsss,love deb
Debole Avatar
March 31, 2012 at 7:14 PM
Hi Carol - Good poem! Especially like the way you ended it. Thank you so much for your supporting comments about my poems. - Gail
Song Avatar
March 30, 2012 at 12:05 PM
Looking for new work from ya, Carol...I bet you are out working in your garden since Mother Nature gave us all a head start!....Hugs, GWendolen
Aul Avatar
March 30, 2012 at 9:26 AM
I am fortunate indeed to enjoy without sneezing, watery eyes, etc. ........ Thank you for your kind comments - you have been a very kind and inspirational person on this site.................George
Dufresne Avatar
March 30, 2012 at 6:35 AM
a shocking reality last line to this Haiku. Well done Carol
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March 30, 2012 at 12:34 AM
Thanks for stopping by to see if i had written a new poem.....thanks also for your advices and comments.....i love flowers and i think i don't have an allergy on flowers....and my eyes open wide every time i see flowers....may you always have a great day and take care always...(<")Love, Melinde
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March 29, 2012 at 11:47 PM
Thanks, Carol, for your kind comment. Allergies aren't great. Have you tried Horseradish? I have treated this problem as a Naturopath - easy to treat with herbs whether it is acute or chronic. There's always a lymphatic and liver involvement. Have always had success. Hope you have a great weekend. Love, Maureen
Dietrich Avatar
March 29, 2012 at 10:02 PM
hahaha, a funny one I think. It gets me every MAy or June, that dang allergy!!! Very nice, Carol.
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March 29, 2012 at 9:18 PM
LoL, i'm inflicted with allergies too so I can totally relate to this. wonderful Haiku, carol. for all this time, i thank you
Dey Avatar
March 29, 2012 at 7:00 AM
Keep this allergies for ever (hahah). Nicely written. Enjoyed this.
Duncan Avatar
March 28, 2012 at 4:59 PM
nice haiku,,, and yes I know the feeling of allergy eyes,, have a blessed day Carol ;}
Devonshire Avatar
March 28, 2012 at 3:25 PM
Oh yes, already people are complaining of their allergies...almost as much as they complained about winter. Spring is beautiful but for people with allergies, this is a tough time. Excellent haiku, dear! Love, Carolyn
Horne Avatar
March 28, 2012 at 1:04 PM
yes, so true! Lovely haiku, Carol
Lu Avatar
March 28, 2012 at 12:47 PM
excellent poetry. will miss ya dear poetess, left 1 standing..... :) when one door closes another opens ;)
K. Avatar
March 28, 2012 at 12:09 PM
That last line caught me by surprise, Carol :) How I hope that allergies won't act up too much though-- and I read your comment in my diminished hexaverse-- At first, I was kind of stumped on how to go about it, but eventually I was able to come up with something, I am hoping you will, too :) hugs!
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