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Haibun Heaven or Hell

As a new day breaks, the sun is peeking through the tall trees. A soft late fall breeze is still in the air. Winter is just around the corner with cold snow. Birds are chirping for their breakfast. Will this day be a day of heaven or hell? Living in this world of beauty is a small piece of heaven in nature. Yet there is danger at every turn. A cute little bunny can become a meal. heaven for bunny no more fear for him free to live

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/4/2024 1:25:00 PM

Whoa!! Surprise ending. Sad that bunny could have avoided being someone else's meal. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 12/5/2024 7:39:00 AM

Thank You for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Heaven or Hell" write to have a Surprise ending. Yes, Bunnies do become a meal & that is sad. Then off to heaven forever to be so cute. I had a couple bunnies when I was a kid. They were so cute/soft. I loved them. Blessings as you write away..................

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/4/2024 10:41:00 AM

Well penned my friend, our word has become evil but thank goodness there is good and beauty still left in it. Bunnies are so cute, my two year old grand-daughter loves her bunny, i have a big play box for her at our home, I LOVE HER TO BITS, -she is part of the good in this world! Hugs and blessings my friend, Jennifer.

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 12/4/2024 12:42:00 PM

Thank You for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Heaven or Hell" write to be Well penned. Yes, Bunnies are so cute. What a lucky two year old grand-daughter you have. I had bunnies when I was a kid. I loved them. Hugs.... Blessings as you write away..................

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/3/2024 10:13:00 AM

Haibun Heaven or Hell~Date Written:12/3/2024~Written By Human Poet......

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/5/2025 9:14:00 AM

Sorry, I did not see your note on this write until today. Glad you enjoyed my "Heaven or Hell" write/story. Also glad you like how I added "Written By Human Poet" in my comment box. So many AI writes are running around. All of my writes are Not AI. Good or Bad, all written by myself. Blessings as you write away..................

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/14/2024 4:27:00 PM

Haha! I love that you clarified it was a human poet :) I also particularly like your prose in this piece. There's something about a well-told story (poetically) that really scratches an itch. This was so nicely done too. Great work, Paula.