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Tasty food passes my lips Fat begins to show Settling on my bum and hips I am feeling low Heading out towards the gym Exercising hard Work out done – I look so slim In my leotard! 04~09~15 Contest: Andrea Dietrich Have you tried a 7/5 trochee? ~awarded 5th place~

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Date: 5/3/2015 9:53:00 PM
Jan, Congratulations on your Trochee poem win. :) SKAT
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Date: 5/4/2015 2:37:00 AM
Thanks so much Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/3/2015 4:38:00 AM
Congrats Jan! Loved reading this again! :) Hugs! Kim
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Date: 5/3/2015 4:46:00 AM
Thanks as ever Kim:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 5/2/2015 9:13:00 PM
Splendid!lovely write,Jan...Congrats on your well deserved win..
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Date: 5/3/2015 4:46:00 AM
Thanks so much:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 9:12:00 PM
Cute, Jan, and well done! Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/3/2015 4:45:00 AM
Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 12:12:00 PM
Jan, a superb meter and win. Mohan
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Date: 5/2/2015 12:31:00 PM
Thanks so much Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 10:37:00 AM
and do tell, what is the hidden meaning of "gym'll fix it" I just took it as a play on the name Jim! Everytime I go to the gym, Joe asks me how was Jim? when I come home!
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Date: 5/2/2015 12:30:00 PM
There was a TV programme in the UK called Jim'll fix it - the presenter was a man called Jimmy Saville - I will say nothing other than google his name and you will see he fell from grace and there has been a massive fallout from it:-( Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 10:36:00 AM
Jan, thanks so much for the "catch" on my triolet. I hope Isaiah has not taken a look at it yet and eliminated me for missing that one line. I had it written down and just forgot to type it Thanks again. I would never have caught it. good luck with your last two stanzas. What kind of poem are you doing? Triolets are the easiest of the options he gave us.
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Date: 5/2/2015 12:28:00 PM
I am trying rhyme royal for the first time - done one stanza so far - it is a real challenge may not get it finished in time:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 10:18:00 AM
Well done Jan! Both the title and contents contributed to this merited win. Congratulations! Hugs // paul
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Date: 5/2/2015 12:25:00 PM
Thanks Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 9:27:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win Jan
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Date: 5/2/2015 12:28:00 PM
Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 7:38:00 AM
This is a "GYM-DANDY" trochee. Congrats Jan on the poem and the workout.
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Date: 5/2/2015 7:43:00 AM
LOL John you won't catch me in a gym - I walk everywhere that is more than enough exercise for me:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 7:38:00 AM
Congrats Jan. Unique title. Hugs.
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Date: 5/2/2015 7:43:00 AM
Thanks John I do love to play with my titles I think they are as important as the body of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 12:54:00 AM
the title is awesome!!!
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Date: 5/2/2015 4:51:00 AM
The Brits on the site will understand the humour in the title - there used to be a TV show called Jim'll fix it :-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 12:53:00 AM
OH, Jan, I was wondering if this was yours!! The second stanza was perfect. but the word "passes" threw off the beat in line one. I think this is great humor. Love it! And congratulations for your win.
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Date: 5/2/2015 4:50:00 AM
Thanks Andrea I am trying so hard to get my meter right but I do try my hardest:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2015 12:46:00 AM
JAN:) Congratulations! Forever ~SKAT~
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Date: 5/2/2015 4:49:00 AM
Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/21/2015 5:11:00 PM
This sounds like me, :) <3 a 7 eve
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Date: 4/21/2015 5:12:00 PM
Thanks Eve:-) I have never been on a diet and not been in a gym in years lol:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 4/10/2015 11:55:00 PM
I pay a guy named Jim to go workout for me, while I stick at home with the tasty foods!!!!! I consider myself so hip now!
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Date: 4/11/2015 3:19:00 AM
LOL Arthur you have it sorted:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/10/2015 8:55:00 PM
Lol..very cute now if only it worked that way for us all.
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Date: 4/11/2015 3:19:00 AM
Thanks Janet:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/10/2015 4:26:00 PM
O, but this is sooo good! I love it! Can I borrow your mentor? I don't have an entry yet..lol! Kidding... hugs! :)
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Date: 4/10/2015 4:30:00 PM
I did struggle with this one and asked advice Kim it is the only way to learn - I just give it a go:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 4/10/2015 8:24:00 AM
Which one is you Jan??? They look like they are having fun. This poem was also fun.
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Date: 4/10/2015 10:53:00 AM
I am a petite UK size 8 (US size 4 I think) - no gym for me and I have never been on a diet in my life lol:-) Hugs
Date: 4/10/2015 1:46:00 AM
That's a positive write Jan! Even if u cud burn ur fat at a gym!!gl in contest!
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Date: 4/10/2015 1:48:00 AM
Thanks for the comment Dr Sharma - I don't go to the gym - keep slim by not over eating and walking everywhere:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 4/9/2015 8:17:00 PM
hahahha!! I like this one... :D!!!! we need to do this at some point.. :D!!//olive eloisa
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Date: 4/10/2015 1:24:00 AM
Thanks Olive I doubt you do you are a stunner:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 4/9/2015 4:42:00 PM
A fun and educational poem. You do know that some in our government are trying to ban leotards in public. I guess they look too good.
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Date: 4/9/2015 4:44:00 PM
oh Franklin that is sad Shame they don't have other issues they can ficus on ! Hugs jan xx
Date: 4/9/2015 3:23:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Way to go..Don't like the exercise though..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 4/9/2015 4:07:00 PM
nor me - I dont do any except walking:-) iugs Jan xx
Date: 4/9/2015 3:10:00 PM
Good luck in the contest Jan with this quirky poem, hugs // James // xx
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Date: 4/9/2015 4:07:00 PM
Thanks James:-) Hugs jan xxxxx
Date: 4/9/2015 2:53:00 PM
- Workout done ...... afterwards hungry ..... very hungry :))) - I wish you best of luck in the contest, dear Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/9/2015 2:57:00 PM
I always hungry after gym :)))
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/9/2015 2:55:00 PM
Many years ago when I used to go to the gym I was never hungry after a work out:-) I no longer go to the gym not done in many years lol:-) Hugs jan xx
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