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Gym'Ll Fix It

Tasty food passes my lips
Fat begins to show
Settling on my bum and hips
I am feeling low

Heading out towards the gym
Exercising hard
Work out done – I look so slim
In my leotard!

04~09~15

Contest: Andrea Dietrich Have you tried a 7/5 trochee?
~awarded 5th place~

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Skat A

May 3, 2015 at 9:53 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your Trochee poem win. :) SKAT

Jan Allison

May 4, 2015 at 2:37 AM

Thanks so much Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

May 3, 2015 at 4:38 AM

Congrats Jan! Loved reading this again! :) Hugs! Kim

Jan Allison

May 3, 2015 at 4:46 AM

Thanks as ever Kim:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Olusegun Arowolo

May 2, 2015 at 9:13 PM

Splendid!lovely write,Jan...Congrats on your well deserved win..

Jan Allison

May 3, 2015 at 4:46 AM

Thanks so much:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

May 2, 2015 at 9:12 PM

Cute, Jan, and well done! Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

May 3, 2015 at 4:45 AM

Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani

May 2, 2015 at 12:12 PM

Jan, a superb meter and win. Mohan

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 12:31 PM

Thanks so much Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 2, 2015 at 10:37 AM

and do tell, what is the hidden meaning of "gym'll fix it" I just took it as a play on the name Jim! Everytime I go to the gym, Joe asks me how was Jim? when I come home!

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 12:30 PM

There was a TV programme in the UK called Jim'll fix it - the presenter was a man called Jimmy Saville - I will say nothing other than google his name and you will see he fell from grace and there has been a massive fallout from it:-( Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 2, 2015 at 10:36 AM

Jan, thanks so much for the "catch" on my triolet. I hope Isaiah has not taken a look at it yet and eliminated me for missing that one line. I had it written down and just forgot to type it Thanks again. I would never have caught it. good luck with your last two stanzas. What kind of poem are you doing? Triolets are the easiest of the options he gave us.

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 12:28 PM

I am trying rhyme royal for the first time - done one stanza so far - it is a real challenge may not get it finished in time:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

May 2, 2015 at 10:18 AM

Well done Jan! Both the title and contents contributed to this merited win. Congratulations! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 12:25 PM

Thanks Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

May 2, 2015 at 9:27 AM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 12:28 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs jan xx

John Lawless

May 2, 2015 at 7:38 AM

This is a "GYM-DANDY" trochee. Congrats Jan on the poem and the workout.

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 7:43 AM

LOL John you won't catch me in a gym - I walk everywhere that is more than enough exercise for me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 2, 2015 at 12:54 AM

the title is awesome!!!

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 4:51 AM

The Brits on the site will understand the humour in the title - there used to be a TV show called Jim'll fix it :-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

May 2, 2015 at 12:53 AM

OH, Jan, I was wondering if this was yours!! The second stanza was perfect. but the word "passes" threw off the beat in line one. I think this is great humor. Love it! And congratulations for your win.

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 4:50 AM

Thanks Andrea I am trying so hard to get my meter right but I do try my hardest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A

May 2, 2015 at 12:46 AM

JAN:) Congratulations! Forever ~SKAT~

Jan Allison

May 2, 2015 at 4:49 AM

Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

April 21, 2015 at 5:11 PM

This sounds like me, :) <3 a 7 eve

Jan Allison

April 21, 2015 at 5:12 PM

Thanks Eve:-) I have never been on a diet and not been in a gym in years lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

April 10, 2015 at 11:55 PM

I pay a guy named Jim to go workout for me, while I stick at home with the tasty foods!!!!! I consider myself so hip now!

Jan Allison

April 11, 2015 at 3:19 AM

LOL Arthur you have it sorted:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka

April 10, 2015 at 8:55 PM

Lol..very cute now if only it worked that way for us all.

Jan Allison

April 11, 2015 at 3:19 AM

Thanks Janet:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

April 10, 2015 at 4:26 PM

O, but this is sooo good! I love it! Can I borrow your mentor? I don't have an entry yet..lol! Kidding... hugs! :)

Jan Allison

April 10, 2015 at 4:30 PM

I did struggle with this one and asked advice Kim it is the only way to learn - I just give it a go:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

April 10, 2015 at 8:24 AM

Which one is you Jan??? They look like they are having fun. This poem was also fun.

Jan Allison

April 10, 2015 at 10:53 AM

I am a petite UK size 8 (US size 4 I think) - no gym for me and I have never been on a diet in my life lol:-) Hugs

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

April 10, 2015 at 1:46 AM

That's a positive write Jan! Even if u cud burn ur fat at a gym!!gl in contest!

Jan Allison

April 10, 2015 at 1:48 AM

Thanks for the comment Dr Sharma - I don't go to the gym - keep slim by not over eating and walking everywhere:-) Hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

April 9, 2015 at 8:17 PM

hahahha!! I like this one... :D!!!! we need to do this at some point.. :D!!//olive eloisa

Jan Allison

April 10, 2015 at 1:24 AM

Thanks Olive I doubt you do you are a stunner:-) Hugs jan xx

Franklin Price

April 9, 2015 at 4:42 PM

A fun and educational poem. You do know that some in our government are trying to ban leotards in public. I guess they look too good.

Jan Allison

April 9, 2015 at 4:44 PM

oh Franklin that is sad Shame they don't have other issues they can ficus on ! Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

April 9, 2015 at 3:23 PM

Reads like a winner..Way to go..Don't like the exercise though..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Jan Allison

April 9, 2015 at 4:07 PM

nor me - I dont do any except walking:-) iugs Jan xx

James Fraser

April 9, 2015 at 3:10 PM

Good luck in the contest Jan with this quirky poem, hugs // James // xx

Jan Allison

April 9, 2015 at 4:07 PM

Thanks James:-) Hugs jan xxxxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 9, 2015 at 2:53 PM

- Workout done ...... afterwards hungry ..... very hungry :))) - I wish you best of luck in the contest, dear Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 9, 2015 at 2:57 PM

I always hungry after gym :)))

Jan Allison

April 9, 2015 at 2:55 PM

Many years ago when I used to go to the gym I was never hungry after a work out:-) I no longer go to the gym not done in many years lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

April 9, 2015 at 1:50 PM

You are beautiful in every way, I can't imagine a personality as bright as yours not illuminating every room you entered! I have only the highest esteem for you because they are well deserved!

Jan Allison

April 9, 2015 at 1:51 PM

aww my friend you are too kind - I am so small you would miss me in the room lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

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