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Bearing the brunt of betrayal, his long-time lady lover leaves him for another flame. Surprisingly saying "I'm so sorry, Sam, we should start seeing other people" Broken by a brutal blindside out of nowhere. He couldn't comprehend the reason; the shock shook him like a loud trembling thunder shakes someone out in the rain Suddenly lovelorn, he's left wondering why. "What did I do to deserve this?" To add insult to injury, he learns she left him for his best friend, Bruce. STRAND CHOICE P,any form,any theme Poetry Contest( Winner: Honorable Mention) Sponsored by Brian Strand Date written: 03/24/2020

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Gideon Foli

Date: 3/27/2020 2:34:00 AM

Very pathetic when the branches of your heart is broken by a true friend whom you trusted. Nicely woven Edward. Keep them coming my dear friend. Love and hugs!!!!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 3/27/2020 5:11:00 AM

Thank you, Gideon:-) Blessings to you!

Eve Roper

Date: 3/25/2020 11:30:00 PM

Edward, great sad poem written very well. A big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve

Edward Ibeh
Date: 3/26/2020 5:56:00 AM

Thank you very much, Eve:-) You stay healthy and safe as well!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/25/2020 11:12:00 PM

Oh dear! This one tugs at the heart. Beautiful alliteration. Congratulations!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 3/26/2020 5:55:00 AM

Thank you, Sam:-) Hey, you wouldn't happen to know a friend of yours named Bruce, would ya? Teehee

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/25/2020 8:51:00 PM

Hi Edward, this is such a strong piece. How sad it is when hearts are broken, especially when there is no warning. Your lines speak well of this situation, painting such strong images on the canvas of the mind. I love the content of this write. It's a fav from me. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend....Mike.

Edward Ibeh
Date: 3/26/2020 5:59:00 AM

Agreed! Thank you very much for the wonderful comments, visit and FAV, Mike!:-) Most obliged.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 3/25/2020 10:04:00 AM

Edward, Stopped in my tracks by the title of your poem. If misery loves company than this poem should be well received. 'You've got to give a little, take a little, and let your poor heart break a little. That's the story of, that's the glory of love.' -Billy Hill

Edward Ibeh
Date: 3/25/2020 1:57:00 PM

I love the lyrics to "The Glory Of Love"! I'm glad this poem resonated with you, Richard:-) Thanks for the FAV!