Edward Ibeh Poet Alliteration

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Gut Punch

Bearing the brunt of betrayal, 
his long-time lady lover leaves him 
for another flame. Surprisingly saying 
"I'm so sorry, Sam, we should start
seeing other people"

Broken by a brutal blindside 
out of nowhere. He couldn't comprehend 
the reason; the shock shook him 
like a loud trembling thunder
shakes someone out in the rain

Suddenly lovelorn, 
he's left wondering why. 
"What did I do to deserve this?"
To add insult to injury, he learns
she left him for his best friend, Bruce.


STRAND CHOICE P,any form,any theme Poetry Contest( Winner: Honorable Mention)
Sponsored by Brian Strand
Date written: 03/24/2020

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Gideon Foli March 27, 2020 at 2:34 AM Very pathetic when the branches of your heart is broken by a true friend whom you trusted. Nicely woven Edward. Keep them coming my dear friend. Love and hugs!!!! Edward Ibeh March 27, 2020 at 5:11 AM Thank you, Gideon:-) Blessings to you!

Eve Roper March 25, 2020 at 11:30 PM Edward, great sad poem written very well. A big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve Edward Ibeh March 26, 2020 at 5:56 AM Thank you very much, Eve:-) You stay healthy and safe as well!

Sam Kauffman March 25, 2020 at 11:12 PM Oh dear! This one tugs at the heart. Beautiful alliteration. Congratulations! Edward Ibeh March 26, 2020 at 5:55 AM Thank you, Sam:-) Hey, you wouldn't happen to know a friend of yours named Bruce, would ya? Teehee

Vladislav Raven March 25, 2020 at 8:51 PM Hi Edward, this is such a strong piece. How sad it is when hearts are broken, especially when there is no warning. Your lines speak well of this situation, painting such strong images on the canvas of the mind. I love the content of this write. It's a fav from me. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend....Mike. Edward Ibeh March 26, 2020 at 5:59 AM Agreed! Thank you very much for the wonderful comments, visit and FAV, Mike!:-) Most obliged.

Quoth Theraven March 25, 2020 at 10:04 AM Edward, Stopped in my tracks by the title of your poem. If misery loves company than this poem should be well received. 'You've got to give a little, take a little, and let your poor heart break a little. That's the story of, that's the glory of love.' -Billy Hill Edward Ibeh March 25, 2020 at 1:57 PM I love the lyrics to "The Glory Of Love"! I'm glad this poem resonated with you, Richard:-) Thanks for the FAV!