Gun

Does not always smell gunpowder Even The license Double-barreled shotgun Hanging with the deer on the wall But if the gun Be translated into any language alive. The smell of death #mostafa_ghalandarzadeh

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Robert Warlov

Date: 12/3/2016 12:23:00 PM

Living men and living languages. The wall displays all the dead equally- gun, deer and license. "Find the cost of freedom, buried in the ground," - Steve Stills (C. S. & N. )

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 10/29/2016 10:25:00 AM

Welcome to the Soup, mostafa! Oh, I feel for the deer for they are such docile creatures! Actions maim, but what if their high pitched voices were their defense? They wouldn't wish to kill, only to be allowed their freedom. Have fun on the Soup!! Best regards, Mikki

Rhoda Galgiani

Date: 10/27/2016 5:25:00 PM

Interesting, but true concept of the 'gun'! rg

Sirat Ahmad Haidary

Date: 10/27/2016 6:24:00 AM

Very nice poem! good luck

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/25/2016 5:22:00 PM

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Manmath Dalei

Date: 10/24/2016 2:18:00 AM

Welcome to Poerty Soup. Good entry with a nice poem. Hope u will enjoy PS very much. Keep on writing..........//:) with love...........//Manmath