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Guilt

She begged me to make love to her
I could not look into her eyes
I wanted to but would not dare
She begged me to make love to her
I knew deep down it was not fair
To lead her on with lust and lies
She begged me to make love to her
I could not look into her eyes 


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Contest: One NEW Triolet
Sponsor: Alfred Vassallo

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2014

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Andrea Dietrich

October 3, 2014 at 9:09 PM

Yep, it has that triolet rhythm. Does "dare" sound like "her" in the way you speak English? I was just thinking of how some people pronounce words differently in different parts of The US, England, etc! This was a great triolet. Did you see Freddie removed his poems from the site and cancelled this contest? I had a triolet waiting in the wings to post for this contest and this is making me nuts now!!

October 6, 2014 at 4:36 PM

Hi Andrea! Yes, for us 'dare' and 'her' rhyme (there are sites that give both words as rhyming). // No, I had not realized that Freddie has removed his poems and cancelled the contest!! Does seem strange. I'll go have a look...// paul

October 1, 2014 at 2:58 PM

You found it difficult to go ahead with this woman. You were strong - I just wonder what the reason was. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

October 1, 2014 at 5:57 PM

Hi Matthew...thank you for stopping by. Age was the main reason....young girls are often infatuated by attraction to older persons! Peace to you too. // paul

October 1, 2014 at 12:23 AM

This is exactly the way a triolet should read. As if no line is repeated, as if you only wanted two rhymes, and not a hint that the first two lines are the last two lines. It reads as if there were no rules and this was your exact write. Beautiful job I hope this ranks high in the contest.

October 1, 2014 at 2:50 PM

I'm so pleased you comment so positively on my triolet, Maurice. This form appears easy to write, but it is the smooth flow that makes it ... glad you found this to be the case. Thank you. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

September 30, 2014 at 4:52 AM

What a gentleman! I wouldn't expect any less from you my friend, Paul! Excellent writing with so much sensitivity and candor!

September 30, 2014 at 4:58 PM

Thank you Demi. I'm no saint, but there are does and donts that form part of our way of living; we cannot afford to exceed limits. Appreciate your sincere comments, my friend. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

September 29, 2014 at 7:03 PM

:) I see you you post it anyway..:) let's see how far this will go..(wink)!!!! expressive poem, I like the second line I could not look into her eyes..:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

October 1, 2014 at 1:43 AM

can i borrow the second line and do a different turn but not triolet.. :D

September 30, 2014 at 4:54 PM

Yes, I did finally post it :) I'm glad you like it; that 2nd line is also my favourite. (...but I will look in yours...anytime:)) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

September 30, 2014 at 8:51 AM

PAUL SOUPMAIL. :D!!!LOOL :D

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

September 29, 2014 at 7:04 PM

I'd like to give a try this triolet but don't know yet what I'll write...:D ??? Topic...

September 29, 2014 at 11:19 AM

very deep and emotive write, my friend

September 29, 2014 at 2:50 PM

Thank you for your positive reaction to this poem, Jack...and for stopping by. // paul

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

September 29, 2014 at 10:22 AM

Woah sensational! If she was much younger then it was great of u not to take advantage of her like many wud. Infatuation hapens but we hav to keep away frm temptations of exploitation. Cheers sir.

September 29, 2014 at 3:50 PM

My deepest apologies...did not know what the 'S' stood for!! I bow in respect:)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

September 29, 2014 at 3:17 PM

I'm a lady not a sir pls. Cheers.

September 29, 2014 at 2:52 PM

Thank you Sir!! Your insightful comments are very close to the mark! I appreciate your most welcome visit. // paul

September 29, 2014 at 9:20 AM

Those eyes will get you won't they..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..I wrote "Sneeze" about my surgery..Sara

September 29, 2014 at 9:40 AM

Thank you for finding the time to visit, Sara. I have been on your new post and can well relate to 'sneezing':) // paul

September 29, 2014 at 7:49 AM

Oh a poem of restraint Paul,,very rare,,unlike your poetry,,,ever so addictive,,,and love to linger there

September 29, 2014 at 3:10 PM

You are too kind, Harry...but I do love your lovely compliments! You are welcome to visit and linger to your heart's pleasure! Thank you. // paul

September 29, 2014 at 4:47 AM

excellent piece of writing paul really love how you drew it

September 29, 2014 at 3:46 PM

Glad you found it to your liking, Liam. Thank you for stopping by once again. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

September 28, 2014 at 11:43 PM

This poem says a lot about your character, which is admirable! Great poem with a sound message!

September 29, 2014 at 3:54 PM

Thank you my fair lady! I appreciate your complimentary words. Lei e` troppo generosa! // paul

September 28, 2014 at 11:21 PM

The poem needs courage to write and to exist, seems you have the courage... well good luck for the contest..

September 29, 2014 at 3:45 PM

Thank you Malik; sometimes to express ourselves we have to show a bit of courage. // paul

September 28, 2014 at 11:09 PM

Very well done my friend.....temptations exist everywhere and we need to do things for the right reasons.

September 29, 2014 at 11:30 AM

Many thanks, Tim. You are right...it's so hard not to fall into temptation....that's why we are often trying to pick ourselves up! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

September 28, 2014 at 5:42 PM

Very clever one Paul! I hoped she took rejection well. Just kidding Paul. Lol ...you're a gent! Lol. I love your triole! Good luck in the contest! Love and light! Xxx D.

September 29, 2014 at 9:59 AM

Thank you Dorian...talking of rejection....you still have not read the follow-up to this one yet:) Love and peace to you! /x/ paul

September 28, 2014 at 4:13 PM

excellent! a difficult time to say no, so more power to you (or the fictional person in the poem)...

September 28, 2014 at 5:35 PM

Thank you Ilene. Your 'excellent' comment is much appreciated! Hindsight reveals a correct decision. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

September 28, 2014 at 3:41 PM

This has a great message.Its so easy to be carried away by temptations at times.Saying no may even seem hard,but in the end ,doing what is moral and right would save our soul,and the 'other's ' soul,even if it might not save our heart.Fred is going to like this one,I am sure.

September 28, 2014 at 5:31 PM

I agree wholeheartedly with your comments, Charm....even if it might not save our heart (you are very right!!). As the Maltese saying goes: jirnexxilek iggib il-bocca hdejn il-likk:) // paul

Eileen Manassian

September 28, 2014 at 2:27 PM

Oh...how hard to say no, Paul. You are a man of integrity. Lovely write. Good luck in the contest.

September 28, 2014 at 2:48 PM

Eileen...there are times when a person has to say no...especially when age comes into it! Thank you for stopping by...missed your lovely presence and comments! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 28, 2014 at 2:21 PM

- The truth is often hard to bear .... it may hurt, but still the best Paul - Great written, luck in contest! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

September 28, 2014 at 2:42 PM

Hi Anne Lise! Glad you like this; it was inspired by a recollection of past years! hugs // paul

September 28, 2014 at 1:44 PM

love and lust - i think Freddie will like this write Paul - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx

September 28, 2014 at 2:42 PM

thank you its my first attempt:-) hugs Jan xxx

September 28, 2014 at 2:38 PM

Thank you Jan. (Read your triolet and I was impressed!) hugs // paul

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